" The Day "


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tis new type of poem to me..i hope I did good...

" The Day "

He takes me out, its about five till midnight
tonight's been amazing everything seems right
he takes  me on a night hike to our favorite place
he sits on one knee and i look down at his face
he says all he feels and i tell him my feelings to
he brings out a tiny black box and says " i want to spend the rest of my life with you "
my mouth wide and tears rolling down
i only nod quick for i cant make a sound
i hug him tightly and he kisses me
iv dreamed this so many times and now you see
one day it will be right...
and I'm awaiting that beautiful night...

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