2-10-1999 southern comfort

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    2-10-1999 southern comfort

    someone had stared deep into your eyes and there they had seen the light
    in your heart they saw your smile and knew things would be alright

    you came to them with questions and said "i want to know"
    why do you have to go away, this stuff is only snow

    a smile was faked as they nodded their head, that is what it reads
    you are perfection at its finest and have done many great deeds

    they lowered their head and turned away as a tear rolled from their eye
    this note says "i will see you around" because i dont like good bye

    out the door and away i flew tears flowing really deep
    you came outside and heard me cry, and said "please dont weep"
    for summer comes again real soon and then you, i will keep

    I did come back to hug you on this very special day
    but do not expect it all that much for soon i must go away

    away he flew up in the sky not watching where he turned
    he flew smack into a telephone wire and that is how he burned

    soon he woke to conscious laying beneath the frozen ground
    he seen the fire and the brimstone and demons all around

    this scene sort of frightened him, but yet he did not know
    since he died stupidly, to hell he had to go
    he seemed to walk for days and nights and all eternity


    until a demon pointed his way, straight to hell hole city
    he walked among the others until the beat was yet to high
    "man' he said its too hot here i think im going to die

    i want the snow, sleet and rain just like i had before
    someone said" my friend your dead and can't have them any more"

    they all made fun and laughed at him because he began to cry
    it was then he took flight and to heaven he did fly

    approaching the gate real happy like he hoped to squeese right through
    the new security system heaven installed turned him icy blue

    frozen solid there he was just standing and under paid
    the angels approached to throw him out but all he did was prayed

    he pleaded to them that all he wanted was just to fly southward
    after all earth was cold, winter was there and he was just a bird

    they smiled and talked then turned to him and said really nice
    it was then his eyes re opened beneath the powerline

    he got up and dusted himself off then checked his wings for goo
    his wings came open and off he went to florida he had flew

    he had not realized upon arrival the hurricanes were there too (he drowned) 

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    WordSlinger commented on 2-10-1999 southern comfort

    02-28-2010

    lol, this is hard core funni, thank you, hope all is well, WS

    teasasue commented on 2-10-1999 southern comfort

    09-11-2009

    this is another good poem, it was written almost as a very real thing and something that happened in you life or someone close, then came the end he had not realized upon arrival the hurricanes were there too (he drowned) I know it was not ment for humor and I am sorry but on this I had to laugh, the poor little brid was send back from heaven to just start all over again were this horriable tale begain, great work

    litldeer commented on 2-10-1999 southern comfort

    08-03-2009

    Wow this poem is magical. First time reading your work and I must say I am intriqued. Great Rhyming. Excellent flow. I look forward to reading more. Thank you for your comments on mine. Write on!

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