3 o'clock low

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    this poem comes from events some people here know about, please comment on this and other poetry, not just mine but everybody's, whether it be a good comment or criticism, tell the author and not others so it gets back, let's all be real here and be upfront

    3 o'clock low

    midday, you filled my heart with joy and passion...you said you liked me and i believed you...i feel like i am the one, chest stuck out, feeling mighty...

    1pm, things not adding up...what you said is not what i think you really meant...coming down off the high i once felt...thinking thoughts not pure of what once was...

    2pm, you made a fool of me...i see i was not that love, was just a convenience to you...there when you needed me to talk to, the sword cuts so deep...still laying there knowing i was the intended victim...let me go in peace please...

    let this be my end, my 3 o'clock low......

                                                  -Edward Orlando Griffin

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    ginga commented on 3 o'clock low

    11-12-2009

    edgee, A straight-forward account of what angst is running through a mind, with the ticking of the clock counting the hours. Very introspective and heartfelt. ginga

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