4 minute symphony.

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4 minute symphony.

I used to be a firework, burning up the evening sky.
Then my colors faded out, ember falling; naked eyes.

They told me I was 'dreamer,'
but I dreamt of all the rights.
They told me what to favor,
but I had no taste in fights.

With every mistake, that I have made,
I've lost my total most.
The dividend has lost its taste -
and the party has lost its host.

I used to be a butterfly, but then the air grew cold.
My wings cracked into mosaic tiles, and now I'm in your home.

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danmartyjake1 commented on 4 minute symphony.

01-13-2011

This is thought-provoking and spans a lot of emotional territory. I like how your poems are shorter and to the point..

AlysonAlive

01/13/2011

I write what flows into my brain, type it and post it. I find over-doing and adding unnecessary things on only complicates my strange though process more...

DeepEclipse commented on 4 minute symphony.

01-12-2011

Hmm, the first part mirrors the last. Perhaps the "home" it speaks of is one of peace, acceptance? Or prision, oppression? Many ways to take it. It feels to me like one who's want and drive is met with slight hesitation in action. Wanting to reach but tiring of the battle to keep the hand steady. What I felt anyway. Enjoyed the piece.

AlysonAlive

01/12/2011

Very, very good interpretation! Best I've heard so far! (: The home is to speak of oppression, yes. You are completely right about the second part. Tired of trying, essentially. Great thoughts.

Crush commented on 4 minute symphony.

01-11-2011

brilliant !.............................................................................!

AlysonAlive

01/11/2011

Thank you(:

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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