a black and white day

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    a black and white day
    A black and white day
    No beautiful sunrise shining in your eyes nor brightening up your day.

    Autumn not the same but dull without fluorescents.

    Rainstorms leave the rainbows come lacking brightness.

    Not being able to enjoy your loves color filled eyes.

    Not seeing the reflection of the sun in the pond creating glistening shadows of light.

    Looking out your window in the mid morning not seeing the dark green grass.

    The little girls Rosie cheeks brightening up from laughter.

    Happiness not the same on a black and white day,
    Enjoying the simple things impossible on a black and white day.

    Oh what an impact a black and white day would have on the lives of earth’s beings.

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    monkyntz commented on a black and white day

    08-10-2009

    beautiful what eles can i say but beautiful. excellent piece
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    Serzi commented on a black and white day

    07-30-2009

    While you are stunningly descriptive and are a much better writer than I was at your age, I am disatisfied with how you concluded this one. I found myself wanting to hear more than "Oh what an impact a black and white day would have on the lives of earth's beings." because I am still hypnotized by "Not seeing the reflection of the sun in the pond creating glistening shadows of light.". This is truly a great work, but I felt the conclusion was a bit forced. Still, like I said, you are already a much better writer than I was at your age. I am in awe and I hope you consider giving my own writing some constructive criticism. Serzi
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    Tray4 commented on a black and white day

    07-21-2009

    If we could look past our obligations and let ourselves to live without limitations, I think we would have alot less of those black and white days. Good Point and great understanding.
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    everafter commented on a black and white day

    07-15-2009

    amazing gift that you have and I pray that it takes you far. you are very good with words and I enjoyed reading this one
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    yvettelove

    07/15/2009

    thanks much mam i appreciate it so much

    daydreamer23 commented on a black and white day

    05-12-2009

    beautiful poem
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