a blinding eclipse

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a blinding eclipse

the world casts a shadow over my heart today
a blinding eclipse of sorrow and woe
tears bleed the color from my humbled eyes
and i blink quickly so the pain wont show


i touch my cheek and a stain appears on my skin
transferring the color of painful memories
the paralyzing thoughts of a final goodbye
and the time since spent in disparity


i contort my face and force myself to smile... and
try shift my thoughts to a time of lesser grey
when i could see a light cast in the dark
and the mirrors reflection didnt see me this way


the gleemless shadows of my sullen eyes
stare lifelessly into a void of nothing
life drips color into deadening thoughts
to fight off the rush of reality


the ever darkening hues of spinning dread
swirl before my bewildered eyes
the shadows move within the vortex
and devour the colors from my mind


wearily the day passes with impulses of desperation
an eternity dies as the second hand unwinds
lost within the shadows of the eclipsing sorrow
i erode in slow motion with the flowing of time

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Doshima commented on a blinding eclipse

09-28-2010

Life,eternity dying, nothingness and many more evolving into eclipsing sorrow -- all woven beautifully into this poem . a wonderful read.

Dano

09/28/2010

thank you very much for your kind words

DeepEclipse commented on a blinding eclipse

09-28-2010

Potent wording Dano. You write well from the darker dimension of things. This is one of those pieces that expresses itself in such honest raw form that some may turn their head, afraid it may take their saftey away. I like how it faces it head on. It is what's felt. Why not express it as it is. Enjoyed the read.

Dano

09/28/2010

thanks so much for your encouraging words

smoothdame commented on a blinding eclipse

09-27-2010

I liked the way you tied the poem with the darkness of an eclipse it made the words more real to me great job.

Dano

09/27/2010

thank you for taking the time to read an comment...

Marsink commented on a blinding eclipse

09-26-2010

The title alone, is very compelling! I think you have eclipsed many who attempt to put such depth of despair into words! Applause building! The tempo of your phrases is excellent!

Dano

09/27/2010

thank you marsink... this is a high compliment coming from you and greatly appritiated

Springsize commented on a blinding eclipse

09-22-2010

The day, as seen and felt by you is sadder than is fair... and you've used so many unusual and creative phrases, such as when the "mirrors reflections didn't see me this way" is so honest and "life drips color into the deadening thoughts" as if to bring the dead back to being... and "shadows devouring the colors" is oddly real... and you end the poem with the fear that it is permanent, unchangeable and painfully, fearfully existing ... almost, as if waiting .. for justice to be finished... although the "unwinding of the second hand" ---eroding in slow motion identifies a hell that Seems unending... and the dark breathes on, as if it were afraid the light would burn more than the fires of nightmares... and this is so hurtful to read, and relate to one's own failings... some, of which can be powerful and horrifically enduring...

Dano

09/27/2010

you always leave such insightful comments... your ability to break down and analyze other peoples thoughts with precision is fantastic... thank you

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

Dano’s Poems (150)

Title Comments
Title Comments
from an angels view 19
searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
disappointmen
t...
1
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
entitlement?!
?!?
1
entitlement!!
!!
1
burning within 4
inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
i will not fear (when my eyes are blind) 2
i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7