A Peek Inside

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    My contribution to this weeks picture poetry forum.

    A Peek Inside
    A peek inside,
    to see what I hide.
    The abyss awaits,
    for the opening of the gates.
    Collected images of moments,
    missed chances of atonement,
    spiral in a cyclone of scattered dreams.

    My heart heavy with regret,
    enticed me to forget.
    Set in stone it is cast, 
    my future a victim of the past.
    Failure awaits my return,
    so it may inhale what I've learned,
    exposing me for all to see.
    A peek inside,
    to see what I hide.
    The abyss awaits,
    for the opening of the gates.
    Collected images of moments,
    missed chances of atonement,
    spiral in a cyclone of scattered dreams.

    My heart heavy with regret,
    enticed me to forget.
    In stone it is cast, 
    my future a victim of the past.
    Failure awaits my return,
    so it may inhale what I've learned,
    and I'm exposed for all to see.

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    chalkout91 commented on A Peek Inside

    03-08-2010

    i liked this how emotional of you...ha its nice to see the softer side of you as well:)
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    Charlie23 commented on A Peek Inside

    01-31-2010

    Very strong wording throughout, I especially like the "Failure awaits my return, so it may inhale what I've learned" I don't know why I'm so drawn to those lines.
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    tierra7 commented on A Peek Inside

    12-06-2009

    Awesome !...... this is expressed in great depth...i love the external & internal boundaries in this....Artie, You Are truly an Amazin' Poet , your writes show so much will and desire to put us into your creations.... they are ....just simply...,awe-inspiring.... thank you for your shares...they are that bonus in life... Love N Light, Terra @}-'-,- (10+ )
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    Artie

    12/06/2009

    Thx so much - I'm glad you enjoy my work

    Kaleidoscope commented on A Peek Inside

    11-16-2009

    What the fuck ! when did you start writing and when did you know you were so gifted.. Thank you once again
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    Artie

    11/16/2009

    Started writing 30 yrs ago - this is the first mention of gifted - thx for reading

    motorheadaches commented on A Peek Inside

    10-16-2009

    Incredible introspect of impending judgement! Nice slylizations and flow.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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