Alone

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I want to see what metaphores you can get out of this poem. I hope you enjoy it.

Alone

A lonely heart, A lonely mind
A lonely soul, a lonely life
these are what I am

A fallen Angel, falls so far
hits the ground, is never found
he is what he is

Darkness here, all around me
light is near, and yet so far
Will I ever move?

The light is bright, so so close
I am moving near
Wait, can it be, an illusion of the mind?

There is no hope, there is no hope
I am all but saved
Can it be, can it be
that I am not meant to live?

The shadows, the walls
The pain, the hate
All of these are me

Shields go up, safety is down
Pain rises, and yet I stay
I stand, I stand, for what you cannot be

This lonely heart, this lonely mind
All has finally gone
To the ground, on the floor
They will soon decompose

Like the flowers, in the meadow
Living but a year
Ashes to ashes, they shall turn
Into which they came
I fall here, I fall here
On my face, into the ground

This Lonely man, this lonely heart
This suffering and this pain
It will end, It must end
it all ends right here

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WinterFrost commented on Alone

10-06-2009

Well shadow and light is suposed to be Rembrants mastery. Your poetry from what I've read asks for a lot of absolutes. No grays. Black white, light dark. There isn't room for compromise nor room for much at all that doesn't fit your view.

nonners commented on Alone

10-05-2009

I LIKED TIS POEM I LOVE THE DARKNESS IN YOU. GOOD READ

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

Venom637’s Poems (35)

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Tainted 2
Gothic Christmas 1
Shattered Souls 1
Blank 2
I am darkness 0
I could only try 1
Broken 2
Cloak 0
This is it 3
My prayer 4
Escape 2
Alone 2
Tainted 2
Succubus 0
Reflection 3
Twisted 1
Stripped Away 3
Dead Man's dance 3
Darkness Rang 1
One Thorn 2
Life 1
Insane 0
FairyTale 0
Lost 1
Mislead 0
Dead 1
Dead once more 2
The roses were red 2
For the life we live 0
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Against my will 2
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Sea of Lies 5
Ten Black Roses 9