Amanda - sorta short story

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    Really random okay. I don't even know if I'm allowed to post this or not...

    Amanda - sorta short story

    Amanda

    Amanda dragged the knife across her own pale wrist. She watched in morbid fascination as the blood rose to the surface of the wound before falling down the sides of her wrist. Amanda was far wiser than she looked. She knew that no matter how many times she cut herself, she would never die. He would never let her die, the demon that resided within her.

     

    Amanda hissed lightly at the slight pain that the knife caused as it made contact with her wrist again. She had been doing this for as long as she could remember. This sick obsession was the only thing that seemed to keep her sane. She knew that she would be sent to the same place as her mother, should anyone find out. But no one could, she would never let anyone know.

     

    Amanda sighed deeply when the blood connected with the pristine white tiles of the bathroom floor. She really needed to clean that, but she didn't want to stop. She didn't want to stop in order to clean up. She just wanted to keep going in hopes that this time...that this time she could finally leave.  

    So many years had passed, yet Amanda still remembered. She still remembered the way it felt when that man had tried to use her. The way it felt when she had been hit for not letting him. Even now after all these years Amanda remembered the sick feeling of pleasure it gave her as she plunged the knife into her own heart.

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    sopphey commented on Amanda - sorta short story

    12-21-2009

    ~It's a great disturbing prose-poem, Alys. The use of short sentences in this piece will really help add more "seriousness." If I think of anything else I'll message it to you.

    daniel081180 commented on Amanda - sorta short story

    12-16-2009

    i read this poem with fascination. you take one to the dark places and yet somehow manage to return. love your work. you are a excellent poet loves. hope to read more from you.

    EvilPoems commented on Amanda - sorta short story

    12-13-2009

    oddly, i can relate this entire peice to my own self. how indulging, i wouldnt mind seeing a published written work out in the world of your works. i had the feeling this was more of a victorian age and time. but that is only my way of viewing this fantastic written masterpeice. It maybe short, but this is far better then anything i could ever make.

    EvilPoems

    12/13/2009

    almost entire peice, the demon inside, wont let me die, i can relate. nothing about the pleasure though.

    EvilPoems commented on Amanda - sorta short story

    12-13-2009

    ah, the power of written word hits the soul and stabs the mind. beauty comes in many forms, but for me, for us, it comes in pain and lust. we are the dark side of the world, we are everytihng we were not ment to be. who changed us? the world. welcome, to everything that is evil.

    Rygar commented on Amanda - sorta short story

    12-13-2009

    another well written piece of macabre. tales from the darkest place where most have been and a few dont come back from... nice write!

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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