ashes to dust

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ashes to dust

touching the soul... an emotional strain
reaching to the depths of pain
caught in an eternal whirlwind... in the blink of eye


dust scatters through the air
the fog of despair
eclipsing life as the world comes down


lost in the wind
scattered again
a whispering voice screaming in the face of god


life shifts to the left
a peaceful unrest
and the world should mourn with a collective sigh


across eternity and into the dark
deaths journey embarked
breathless a tear streams down a sullen face


darkened kisses of blood
of blasphemous love
leave a bittersweet taste in the mouths of the enchanted

 

a soul caught in strife
a killing by life
the heart of a dark giant beats no more


like a mid-autumns rust
from ashes to dust
time turns the world to a mournful shade of grey

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Madelynn commented on ashes to dust

04-29-2010

When all that we are, and everyone we are close to-or, just know casually-are FIN, the concept of life really can become alot less 'worthwhile', cant it?-The mind frame you had to put yourself into, to create such depth is that of spirit who really gets the whole...'why' to life! I find this piece to be brilliantly dark, yet, extremly truthful about our end in this plain. Dano, the one who inspired your write, would be above and beyond proud of you for such dedication to ALL human spirits! Let me say this -Your work will never be dust in the wind-this kind of talent never dies!! -smiles,Maddi

Dano

04/29/2010

thank you so much maddi for such a nice and insightful comment... this was a very emotional peice for me write and i actually have yet to be able to go and read it all of the way through again with braking down

Springsize commented on ashes to dust

04-28-2010

Dano, the Form of this poem is perfect. I immediately noticed that you're accentuating your thoughts with two short lines, followed by the long line... which really does set the long line in a kind-of spotlight. It's a strong technique, and a good read. The message is, the other swing of the pendulum... taking Reader into the pits... It's like being in the Duende, seeing the worst from the best view. Very contrasting. And after several reads and acute attention, I note that the experience occurs in the blink of an eye... whew! ... but the ending is the keypoint best, "mournful shade of gey" is an environment that feels detached and seemingly void of emotion. Again... the contrast from the two moods..is striking... And well-written.

Dano

04/29/2010

thank you spring for reading and for the nice comment

TheDreamWalker commented on ashes to dust

04-27-2010

truly amazing dano as always your writing amazes me

Dano

04/27/2010

thanks for always leaving such nice comments...

ansari commented on ashes to dust

04-23-2010

dano, enjoyed your poem. a journey deep down into the heart or time , expressions so imaginative so vivid so powerful. keep writing...its a pleasure to read them.

Dano

04/23/2010

thank you ansari for taking the time to read and comment... it is very much appriciated

ladynight commented on ashes to dust

04-23-2010

its as if you are speaking of death. not sure if its the death of something specific or death in general. but it kind seems more of a general sense. there are so many feelings and emotions wrapped up in this piece. its like as your reading thoughts form in your mind. your words are amazing.

Dano

04/23/2010

thank you lady... this was a tough one for me to write...

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

Dano’s Poems (150)

Title Comments
Title Comments
from an angels view 19
searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
disappointmen
t...
1
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
entitlement?!
?!?
1
entitlement!!
!!
1
burning within 4
inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
i will not fear (when my eyes are blind) 2
i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7