Before the Sun Goes Down

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    Before the Sun Goes Down
    Rather quite early i retired
    From my hearts sweet desires-
    Reading about things under the sun,
    Writing true tales that make brave hearts run.
    Like a punch on the right eye,
    I was pushed to quench the fire.
    And for such a long time my heart did cry
    As i let this fire run dry.

    But again i have been punched
    This time for the right reason.
    For while i gave room for the flesh to surface,
    I was oblivious; unaware of the season.
    Distracted and Amused
    Addicted and Confused,
    Indulging in the fruits of those fulfilling their destiny
    24, House, Prison Break and Lost
    Smallville, Heroes
    Housewives, Models and Dancers.
    For as i watched;
    A victim of their 'pen' shaping lives,
    I let mine receed 10,000 miles.
    They crippled my mission when they stole my time,
    They blurred my vision when they seduced my heart.
    For in love i was with this dealy addiction.

    Fortunate i am to have repented and frowned,
    Realising the emptiness and the 'weight' occupied
    By these deceptions that revive millions
    That are young and talented
    But helplessly retire
    Far too early
    Before the sun goes down.

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    boomboom56 commented on Before the Sun Goes Down

    01-18-2012

    pretty cool stuff! like the way you use words. it is very easy too be seduced by joy ride.
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    BlaQReign commented on Before the Sun Goes Down

    10-11-2009

    Enjoyed Imensely, and I concur with Lionsss...Do yo, and all the ride will be worth the time...BlaQ
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    Lionssss commented on Before the Sun Goes Down

    03-02-2009

    I really enjoyed your poem. Keep that fire burning and putting your thoughts to pen and paper. You have a true talent but always remain true to yourself and your style of writing. Write for yourself, first and foremost, the rest will follow.
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    Twicedoubleyou commented on Before the Sun Goes Down

    12-15-2008

    Wow!
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    ivecute77 commented on Before the Sun Goes Down

    11-24-2008

    That is an amazing poem, well written, I loved it, thanks for the read, please keep them coming.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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