Birth

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  • Life

    Birth

    Boom, life

    Seeing ceiling

    Finding sun

    Finally feeling

    Hallway light

    A child is born

    The world awaiting

    A void torn  

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    rsalassi commented on Birth

    09-06-2010

    I like the poem...til the last line, which is ok...actually, it's fine. But I think you could do better. Think about it.
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    Donyon commented on Birth

    09-06-2010

    I think the title is perhaps a bit too obvious.
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    stigbohnolsen

    09/06/2010

    Perhaps, but i really couldn't think of anything else. :p

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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