Black

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Warning - disclaimer to my dark side... Never read Poe before bed HAHAHAHA! (spoken in my best and deepest Vincent Price voice)

Black

Black

 

Ravens wings so black they’re blue

Please fly away, fly away far

Your shadow darkens my heart with a saddened hue

 

Mysterious creature creepily sitting there

Do you mask the sun with dark clouds

And thicken the air with abysmal despair

 

You have wilted the flowers to form my desolate road

Causing my journey’s quest to prematurely reach its end

My burdens are such that I can no longer bare the load

 

Where have the leaves fallen from the lifeless tree

Oh sullen black bird that haunts from tangled branches

Why are you grotesquely glaring back at me

 

With stilled heart there’s something whispering in my head

My eyes slowly draw shut darkening as raven’s flesh

Tightly I hold onto my soul as my spirit departs,

for now I know “I’ll wake up dead”

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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icu2 commented on Black

12-02-2009

This is riviting! You truly are a master at your craft! BIG FAT TEN.

soulwriter

12/03/2009

Wow and WOW - thank you my new friend... we shall share more.

inkmaster commented on Black

11-24-2009

Better than Poe it holds you there and ends so graceful.......... inkmaster

soulwriter

11/24/2009

That is one high compliment that I am most grateful for... May artist of all media always inspire the writer as the writer encourages the reader - who form new images in their minds to create a new and better world!

stellar commented on Black

10-14-2009

As i read your poems...i see u are a great visual artist...u have have such a great affinity with colors and words...the combination of this is a wonderful poems

stellar

10/14/2009

PS: the word wonderful don't even justify your poem lol

soulwriter

10/16/2009

This is one poem that wrote itself quickly in the middle of the night and still it seems to be unfinished... thank you for your comments.

jademelissa74 commented on Black

09-07-2009

An arrangement made of mystical phrases. A perfect imagery for a dar scene. You maintain the level of interest throughout. This was brilliant Jeff!

soulwriter

09/07/2009

Thank you for your true personal perspective which I always value greatly.

SavVySam commented on Black

08-06-2009

Poe sits right beside Shakespear on my shelf. (discriptive line) "thicken the air with abysmal dispair". Nice job

soulwriter

08/06/2009

As my beautiful love would say - she would loudly proclaim "Poe Rocks" thank you for reading!

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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