BloodStone Hotel

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Oh.... Do you need a room for the night? :Well I have just the one for you.... It's very Budget Friendly and has a Killer View! :)

BloodStone Hotel

The sky was dark ... Pitch black in fact,
The wind was brisk and cold as ice.
I had been riding for hours -at least it seemed,
I needed to find a place for the night.
A neon light glowed ... just ahead on the bend,
Beckoning my sore bones - a place to lie my head.
The “Vacancy” sign lit, a welcome sight indeed,
I pulled in, parked my bike, while sighing in relief.
~~~
I heard the wind howling … singing it's song of the dead,
Walking up the BloodStone path, longing for a soft bed.
The bellboy took my bag as he smiled and gravely asked,
”Will you be staying alone Sir, or are you expecting any guests?"
I told him I was a drifter who just needed a room for the night,
A lonesome wolf who had just grown tired from his lonely ride.
The bellboy said "Very good Sir - I have just the room for you" 
As he led me down the darkened halls to a room called Crimson View.
~~~
Upon entering I felt it - A rush of sadness and overwhelming grief,
I knew something sinister had happened here, I felt the misery.
I tipped the Bellboy his due and then I readied myself for bed,
The room was cloaked in crimson linen, blood red pillows for my head.
As I sank into it's softness, Startled ... I heard a deep agonizing moan,
I knew someone or something was there and knew I was not alone.
A coldness swept over me - like icy fingers touching my nude body,
Felt like I was being violated - by a presence that was ungodly.
~~~
The apparition showed itself – In the form of a beautiful woman.
Looking up into my eyes as she started slowly engulfing.
She licked her lips and smiled at me – As she went down for another taste.
Drawing hard she drank so deep not letting a drop to waste.
She lift her head with a soulful sigh – While gliding up to give me a kiss.
Hovering gracefully over me like a cloud of erotic mist.
We kissed each other so deeply – Tongues twisting and swapping souls.
Locked together in ecstasy as the room began to groan.
~~~
She arose to take me deep inside – Gripping hard with her guiding hand,
Plunging deep in wanton desire ~ that a mere man couldn’t understand.
With a need so raw and intense – To become one with the seed of life,
A never-ending craving ~ feeding, her constant desire to be alive.
She drinks in deep, my essence – My soul drawn from my mortal vessel,
Damned to eternal darkness ~ becoming one with this evil brothel.
I’m now a part of the madness – My soul ~ a prisoner of the BloodStone,
Forever bound to the sadness  - In this Hotel Hell that I call home.

 ~~~

A woman then enters the hotel – Crying, that her Husband has disappeared.
Says “We had a fight, he took off on his bike and it’s the worst I do fear”
The bellboy greets and comforts her – And says
“He’s here Miss, He’s waiting for you”
As he leads her down the darkened halls to a room called Crimson View!

 ~~~

 KjK050510

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am2anangel commented on BloodStone Hotel

06-04-2010

excellent spooky tale. I enjoyed as always. well done.-tonya

knight4696

06/07/2010

Thanks Tonya! I'm happy you enjoyed. As you know ,, sometimes my muse gets a little dark and twisted ... but I like it that way! lol! :) Thanks again! Ken

countrypoet commented on BloodStone Hotel

06-03-2010

Ken, This is a very darkly erotic poem which is very captivating and grabs your attention until the wonderfully written twist ending.Well done my friend. Terry

knight4696

06/07/2010

Thanks Terry! :) I'm happy you enjoyed my friend! I know sometimes my writings are a little graphic and dark ... but I enjoy the creativity that it allows me and Nicole is my number one fan and loves my dark & twisted side. lol! :) Thanks again for the Kudos! Ken

Springsize commented on BloodStone Hotel

05-23-2010

Your Poetic Story begins and captures the curiosity with a dark night adventure... and it flows with new imagination and syllabic stress ease, so good writing there... I notice also, that there is no hotel name, only Vacancy and need.... so you have Reader's attention, acute, like a cat. .. and now, ok, here is where I wake up... at the room of the Crimson View... that's it... outta here... Tues is a coward... poof... but in you go, must be the Knight thing. Ok, I have finished reading this poem, and I don't think I did more that gasp from the description of the room til the end. What a fascinating and entertaining Tale. So vivid awe-gasping surprise, sensual... and even adds a twist end.

knight4696

05/23/2010

lol! :) Thanks again Spring! You always leave the most awesome comments! :) I'm happy you enjoyed your stay at the BloodStone! I am sure when time permits that I will expand on this and make it a series .. Crimson View is only one room ... there may be many more to follow. Thanks again my friend - Much appreciated! :) Ken

Corinna commented on BloodStone Hotel

05-23-2010

Drawing hard I drank so deep not letting a drop to waste...I love the taste this piece leaves behind. Still licking my lips.

knight4696

05/23/2010

Thanks Corinna! I don't know which is hotter - the poem or your comment? LOL!! :) Thanks! Ken

stellar commented on BloodStone Hotel

05-22-2010

My gosh Knight....Amazing!!!...I love it so much...this is a high quality erotica....I love the story, the wit, and of course your descriptions...worthy to read again and again...so addicting...^_^ v

knight4696

05/22/2010

Thanks Stellar! :) I appreciate it Pal! I'm happy you enjoyed your stay at the BloodStone! :) If you like this one - I think you'll like Ghost Writer .. Another one of my story poems that delves into the darkside. Thanks again my friend! :) Ken

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