Bulimic

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  • Sickness

    Bulimic

    Bulimic

     

    She smart she nice

    She really has an appetite

     She tall she thin

    Who do you think of then?

    She splurges on food when no one looks

    Who are the crooks?

    The magazines or books

     

    She purges every night

    Is that alright

    She purges with ever meal

    What’s the deal?

    She work out for fun

    May to overdone

    She thinks she fat

    What with that?

     

    How does she stop?

     When friends say “what have you done”?

    Is it fair when someone cares?

     

    She says she alright

    By that’s a lie

    She said she on a diet

    And starts a riot

     

    What she needs is help not scorn

     

    She a bulimic

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    bloomingsun commented on Bulimic

    12-17-2009

    With some minor corrections this has the potential to be really great. The message is strong. I like it.

    BrittKun

    12/19/2009

    thanks so what do I need to correct? LOL post me back Thanks for the comment!! : )

    danmartyjake1 commented on Bulimic

    12-17-2009

    I got the message. I think it would flow better if the proper tense and plurals were used at the right places. It sort of sounds cramped because of the missed plurals but I like the rhyming. Keep writing and let your inner self speak heartily.

    BrittKun

    12/18/2009

    Thanks I got the Idea from health class

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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