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Cave

Cave

 

I visit you in your cave.

It is a lovely cave

But it is still a cave.

 

I want to be in nature

Where the birds sing the songs I long to hear

 

I want to wash my face with the wind

And excite every neuron with the icy flow of pure streams

 

I long to breath clean air untainted by re-circulation

And I hope to feel the mud squish between my toes

 

I don’t wish to live in a cave

But, alas I do for pay

Do you still want to wallow?

 

It is a lovely cave

But it is still a cave.

 

So, take me on a journey

Where the only sounds are silence

And time is forever

 

Hurry now, time’s a-wastin’

And my senses are dulled daily

 

Tell me the words I long to hear

And breathe a new life to my heart

 

Shock my system with renewal

Purge me of my old ways

 

Show me the obstacles I have constructed

Let me hear the angels sing

 

Help me escape my cave.

 

©7710936pjeanmarie

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RKCHOWDARY11 commented on Cave

05-18-2011

It is beautiful with sweet metaphors and very meaningful

jeanpnkldyg

05/18/2011

Thank you for stopping by! : )

blackfootlady commented on Cave

12-07-2010

Not Bad,Very different and unique.I liked it.Keep writing-God-Bless

jeanpnkldyg

12/07/2010

Thank You. Many returns.

Olan01 commented on Cave

12-07-2010

I live in a city cave but came from a forest dwelling where nature was my abode. Turkeys, deer, fox, coyotes, bobcats, mink, weasels, ground hogs, owls, eagles, hawks, skinks, snakes, tall oaks and hickories were at my front doors day and night. But then there were those pests; ticks, chiggers and mosquitoes were blood sucking predators who loved my warm blood. It is a wonderful experience but now I am content to visit and take my Deep Woods Off. Nice poem and filled with great meaning. Olan.

jeanpnkldyg

12/07/2010

Glad you enjoyed!

Maleficent commented on Cave

08-24-2010

wow! that hit home on multiple levels... I know a giant & wallower who should read this... straight to fav's... write on! ;)

jeanpnkldyg

08/25/2010

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment - I hope it helps!

ApaqRasgirl commented on Cave

08-13-2010

wonderful write dear, so many of us are trapped in our own little caves afraid to reach out. great read with very nice flow.....thanks for sharing....love asha

jeanpnkldyg

08/14/2010

So glad you stopped by to read...Many returns

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

jeanpnkldyg’s Poems (51)

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When Words Fail.... 1
For His Glory....a prose piece. 1
My Place...today 0
Just a thought... 1
I Pray 0
Sufficient Fear 1
Purposed to Love 0
Grace 0
Mother 0
Illegitimate Child 0
Word 0
Facebook Fetish 0
When the Ancients Love... 0
Going Home 0
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Never Ending... 1
For J. C. P. (13y) 2
Fly Away 6
This Battle is .... (2) 7
TO BE LOVED 5
Look Up.. 3
MYSTERIOUS ENEMY 1
boredom 2
Angels 2
Christmas Musings 6
Letters, Artwork and Inspiration 4
The Vanished 8
What more to say... 6
For the Fall 5
Gratitude 3
Surfer Dude 26
Cave 16
Glorious, Wonderful.... 4
So far, Untitled 4
Love, Leave me alone 6
I saw your face 4
Request for Intercession 3
Until My Dying Day 11
No Glory Here 5
Day Is Done 6
Immersion of Self 4
Returning 4
My Children's Mother 6
Fortunate Circumstance 2
Sentiment for a Daughter 4
Untitled Conversation 4
Alone With God 6
Still Waters 7
The Soldiers Prayer 4
Slip Away From the Darkness 4