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    This is a colaborated work betwen me and Redbloodink. We decided to freestyle and this is what we came up with. Enjoy! :)

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     KING : You, you there, woman who captures my attention,
     REDBLOODINK: You there the one who I captivate,
     KING: Yes me, me, shy, but full of promise, full of life,
     REDBLOODINK: I feel the energy to much to ever mention....
     KING: Our vibes stronger than a Lamborghini Reventon,
     REDBLOODINK: To fast for the rest to see, or recognize.....
     KING: But never too fast for us to sit still, observe without rise,
     REDBLOODINK: I feel the intense heat and passion in this night sky,
     KING: What to do with such a strong, powerful supply,
     REDBLOODINK: What to do , oh what to do...... I sit quietly,
     KING: Embrace, no need to sit, rise gracefully,
     REDBLOODINK: The arching of my back, shows you that I'm hot....
     KING: Lets see if you sizzle, if i touch you alot,
     REDBLOODINK: I quiver and shake in extasy and bliss,
     KING: The dance has begun, nothing now to miss,
     REDBLOODINK: I feel you squrimming under me to my surprise....,
     KING: Didnt know we were laying down, not that i oblige,
     REDBLOODINK: So now that I have you attention.... and have you captive, what would you think.... If this was a fantasy never to come true.....
     KING: Live in the moment, we will never feel blue,
     REDBLOODINK: A love for us, one to come let it be true....
     KING: And see what bliss we never knew,
     REDBLOODINK: So as we become one...., will that do?
     KING: It suffices me, can it suffice you too?
     REDBLOODINK: Just two lonely hearts beating and waiting for the one.....
     KING: Or just someone to play with under the sun,
     REDBLOODINK: What more can I say or do...... except kiss you!
     KING : What took you so long, you making me miss you!

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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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