Connection

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  • ListninEar
  • got scared.....tried to log in from my facebook and it didn't work! I thought the sight had gone down and all my poems were lost! SO GLAD original poetry.com is still up and strong!!

Poem Commentary

Woke up this morning and this poem just spilled out onto paper.  It's simplistic in it's rhyming and doesn't use fancy words or lots of imagry but it seems to make it's point across painfully clear.  I must be digging deep somewhere to work through this crap.  If you don't like the poem, it might be because it isn't for you.  This one is for me!  I'm the one that needs to hear the message that it wasn't all my fault.

Connection

You were right here
but, only, you were miles away
I searched your face for something
to make the emptiness go away

I looked for the connection
that had brought us to this place
a smile, a nod, or anthing
but it just was not the case

I was your brand new bride
we'd been married a short time
I never dreamed that with all my faith,
I could ever cross that line

I had your baby boys
wasn't that suppost to make you close to me
I tried my best to take care of you,
but you didn't take care of me

I learned to make homemade bread, and homemade pies
you said "eh, there okay"
I felt invibible to you
and tried to shake that feeling away

I was a beast in bed, nymphotic,
yet your touch just left me numb
I'd still search for that connection
but it had somehow come undone

So I looked out there for help
wondered what I was doing wrong
he said "is your husband there right now?
Is he home or is he gone?"

"No,  he's away today
and the boys are down for naps"
He told me I did nothing wrong
"Your man's an idiot, an ass."

I felt that connection again
only this time, there with him
he acknowledged my existance
and he made my body sing

So now, you have a brand new wife again
and this time, it isn't me
while things with us went wrong with us
from ball and chain I'm free

Go back to school and keep a job
and make her feel she's beautiful
and when you look for a connection
this time I hope it's mutual

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JLorian commented on Connection

06-21-2010

You have a gift for illustrating your emotions. This is a very painful piece. I noted a couple of spelling errors in this one also and the word "only" doesn't seem to work in the second line. Otherwise, nice piece. Keep writing.

ListninEar

07/06/2010

Thank you for both the compliment and the constructive feedback that the spelling errors just seem to jump out at you. I did look back at the "only," but I like it...it's just kind of a mood thing for me. I could probably get rid of the "but" instead; however, I like it too even though, your right, it is kind of off a bit. Maybe it should be written "but...only..." not sure. Thanks again though!

MarionYost commented on Connection

04-06-2010

sad, the emotion's definitely the strong point of this poem, Funny.. No matter how bad you get hurt, you still always wish the best for them (If it's real love). Awesome job. All the best -Marion-

ListninEar

07/06/2010

I'm so grateful that you have taken the time to read and comment on some of my poems. I find your poetry quite moving as well.

ericegardner commented on Connection

12-13-2009

to share a home with you to share a life with you to receive your love and not cherish it every day what a fool that deserves little pity when he treated you this way how empty you must have felt when his indifference was dealt but for better or for worse, when love is lost, all happens for a reason i only hope when you turn around, new joys will fill your heart this season

ListninEar

12/20/2009

Thanks, what a sweet comment. I'm no Martha Stewart, but I do try. I've learned the things I do I need to do for me not for anyone else's appreciation. Most people never truly feel appreciated. But I really wasn't and I'm glad I'm not still living to try to exist in his eyes. Now that we aren't together anymore it is wonderful to be invisible to him!

kdarcy commented on Connection

11-21-2009

Loved it, life is something indeed. You write and keep on writing. Check out my piece " Broken Candy Wrapper" if you find moment, it may encourage you. I will check back on you soon, be well k

ListninEar

11/24/2009

Thanks, I will definetly have to read your work. Thanks for your support and encouragement!!

tonid commented on Connection

11-18-2009

Dear Listen, this is the first chance Iv'e had to read your very moving poerm. It is a 10..it has captured what my life was like years ago. Very moving in it's content, broken hearts do heal my dear, and you will find someone who will appreciate your charms and pies =)...Your friend, Toni

ListninEar

11/24/2009

Thanks so much for sharing your own personal connection to my poetry. Oh, it's the right season for loving my pies too!!! LOL!

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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