Controlled

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Reposted (written years ago, but always a lesson well learned and applied): There are times that we feel trapped by our own emotions, while finding ourselves captured by the alluring spell of another. Not all love is perfect, the important self evaluation is to be strong enough to find the power from within to be in control of your own destiny.

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Beguile, beget, beset asunder

I betray the spell you cast me under

 

Dwindling to dwell

Dangling, devour, to have fallen and fell

 

A slain, I complain; assassin, insane

No sanity, consecrated with pain

 

Mercy - merciful, unmarried, dismayed

Which you tarried to torture, tempered; afraid

 

Clawing , cleaving, why crying when

Tempted, trapped in your deceitful den

 

With grudge, gasping, push-pulling

Sanctified, sexually alluring

 

Hampering, harping ones heart

Unconcerned, not learned, exploited apart

 

Worried and weathered, binding in hell

How to dissipate a portentous spell

 

Vehement or virulent kind of being

I possess now a succinct sight of seeing

 

The mystic has been tattered and torn

Facing the enmity of a loving scorn

 

Vindicated from an amorous greed

A once inextricable soul is freed

 

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JadedJezzabel commented on Controlled

08-07-2010

you brought the damn thing here soul..........love the topic......love the time and the rhyme was perfect...........awsome

knight4696 commented on Controlled

05-07-2010

Soul - I love the word choice and flow of this piece. Very unique rhyming scheme and the content is definately a lesson well learned - Great write Pal! :) Ken

soulwriter

05/07/2010

And yet another one of my personal favorites.... just started playing with the sounds of words and this started running and jumping all over the written page - one definitely done on notebook paper and moved all around to develop a certain meaning and sound. Thanks my friend!

Marsink commented on Controlled

01-22-2010

Been there, lost that. your approach is very atypical in structure with alliteration and consecutive lines rhyme. I really enjoyed the intensity and carefully chosen words paired to have their discreet effect! A 10 for shore!

ArizonaPlay commented on Controlled

11-23-2009

This has now become my most favorite poem's on here very very dam fine job

soulwriter

11/23/2009

An honor and a half - I thank you ... "words are eternal, once spoken they can never be erased from space!"

mamasan commented on Controlled

11-07-2009

Ah the web we sometimes spin is of our own making. But, sometimes things can be undone and moved to a new beginning. Perhaps our accountability and responsibility will be what attends to our tears deep within our furrowed cheeks.

soulwriter

11/11/2009

Wise words - thx so much for the comments

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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