Cranium

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Me think i'm a little board. Back to work tomorrow. TG

Cranium

I’m a blank canvas

Burning at the door

My thoughts are voluminous

Countless

They're storming at my door

Smoldering

A crying flame

Knock Knocking

A painted picture

A canvas

On my

Cranium

Door

 

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Jasinful commented on Cranium

04-22-2010

Love this poem. How well you have put into words for me, the confusion we sometimes have at what we are thinking and feeling. Great visualization!!

bluskyinthenite

04/22/2010

thank you very much for reading my poem. I find my self confused many a time. Confusion is my middle name. Thanks again.

devaamido commented on Cranium

04-12-2010

What you need is a regular meditation practice. LOL.

bluskyinthenite

04/12/2010

he he he Yes i do at that.

knight4696 commented on Cranium

04-10-2010

Blue - A very interesting write my friend. I love the metaphors ... You certainly say a lot in very few words! Nice Job! :) Ken

bluskyinthenite

04/10/2010

Getting into poetry more so each day. .

Teardrops commented on Cranium

04-09-2010

you see all kinds of picture bombing the mind at once great write thanks Marie

bluskyinthenite

04/10/2010

Good Morning Marie. thanks for reading. I dont want to go to work..

RHPeat commented on Cranium

04-09-2010

Blusky// Nice metaphorical piece. I think you want "they're" in this line. (There storming at my door), but I'm not sure. I might say "knock-knocking" in L8. just for the rhythm. I think it would run together with "a painted picture" a bit better. Try it and see what it sounds like to you. It is quite interesting how you have tied all the concrete images together. Well done. A poet friend. RH Peat

bluskyinthenite

05/02/2010

Thank you for the suggestion. I changed it. It flow well

RHPeat

05/02/2010

You might want to look at my notes on the poetry school forum boards in the thread "working toward the sonnet" There is a lot of good general information there when it comes to just writing free verse. A poet friend// RH Peat

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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