Crimson Tears

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    This poem was supposed to appear in an anthology called 'Book Of Dreams', but due my being away from home I never submitted the final proof... maybe next time I guess. Well, now at least I can share it with you.

    Crimson Tears

    My still beating heart is awash

    With the dying flame of lamenting perfection,

    I am afraid of the stirring within me,

    But gripped with a desire,

    A want, a thirst for the fire.

     

    Surely it is impossible,

    To want and to need,

    And to shy and to flee,

    The self same idol,

    My sacrilegious divinity.

     

    There was a gap from the first,

    A rift with a bridge,

    A swinging tightrope spanning the gorge;

    It grew and crumbled,

    Was remade and held fast,

    Fell and was broken,

    And now cleaves in twain,

    To halves of a whole,

    Ended at last.

     

    What I would not give, to see you smile again.

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    MindNumbing commented on Crimson Tears

    10-22-2010

    I must thank Arron for guiding me here, because this is simply gorgeous! Each line is fantastic, from the first to the last... but I especially love the lines "I am afraid of the stirring within me, But gripped with a desire, A want, a thirst for the fire", indicating that we have no control whatsoever over our own emotions when it comes to love. So very true... well done!
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    Narrator

    10/22/2010

    Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and comment! I am glad you enjoyed it :). It was a particularly meaninful piece for me :). Love is completely beyond our control it is something raw and funamental to who we are. Thank you again!

    arronpalmer commented on Crimson Tears

    10-20-2010

    Stunning, majestic, beautiful, [insert dozen more]. Given half an hour and a pen, you are unstoppable. It is a literary crime this did not get published, the final line is so so heartfelt, I almost shed a tear. Nearly. Not quite, but close. I didn't even cry at Titanic, so you're doing well!!
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    Narrator

    10/20/2010

    And a dozen thanks beside! I was a little diappointed but then I suppose I now have the chance to improve :). Thank you again, now that put a smile on my face :). Love truly felt is impossible to deny.

    ApaqRasgirl commented on Crimson Tears

    08-21-2010

    wonderful write dear, so filled with emotions through all the words.....I thoroughly enjoyed this......thanks for the great read......love asha
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    Narrator

    08/21/2010

    Thank you for reading and commenting! Love is truly something which will always catch you off guard, and I think always brings out the best poet in someone :). Thank you for your kind words, much obliged to you. Narrator.

    dahlusion commented on Crimson Tears

    08-21-2010

    "What I would not give, to see you smile again."—this line is so real and alive. a lovely poem. peace and light, dah
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    Narrator

    08/21/2010

    Many thanks Dah. As always, thank you for reading and I very much appreciate you taking the time to comment :). Have a nice evening, Narrator.

    raziel69 commented on Crimson Tears

    08-20-2010

    this is another winner, great write. 10 from me...Raz
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    Narrator

    08/20/2010

    Thank you again! I am glad you took the time to read and leave a comment. Narrator.

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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