Dancing Away From Me

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    It has been a long time since I published on this site, but I found myself drawn back.

    Dancing Away From Me

    My first steps were slow,

    Unshore and faltering.

    You offered me a hand,

    Tied me to the ghost

    Of underplayed

    Masculinity.

     

    You were a 21st century

    Activist.

    Liberal gentleman,

    Utilitarian artisan.

    You were my very own

    Walking contradiction,

    And I was having

    The time of my life.

     

    You were never tender

    At the start

    You were detached,

    Full of life and love.

    You were a spirit out to see.

    And then I was your anchor.

    Unwanted shackles.

     

    I was the old and weary

    Wanderer.

    You were the aspiring

    Freedom-fighter.

     

    I think you want to give in

    Did; didn’t. Who the hell knows?

     

    We danced a sultry waltz

    A staccato flamenco,

    Our music was like wildfire.

     

    Then you made the mistake

    Of pausing and smelling

    The too sweet air.

     

    I danced on and you slowed.

    I tried to pull you too,

    But you looked back.

    Sighed.

    Remembered.

    Wandered away.

    You were lost.

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    poett commented on Dancing Away From Me

    02-07-2013

    Nice write I imagined in my mind a couple dancing a tango. Loved it...
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    Narrator

    02/15/2013

    Thank you :). I was imagining the same as I wrote, so I am glad what was a powerful image for me, came across to you too. Thanks again!

    jademelissa74 commented on Dancing Away From Me

    02-05-2013

    I love the way in which you manage to weave through reality and the "what ifs". You have a creative imagination. I enjoyed your writing.
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    Narrator

    02/15/2013

    Thank you again for commenting :). Sometimes separating the too becomes very tricky, but that is a the recipe for life the world over, wondering what could have been.

    dahlusion commented on Dancing Away From Me

    01-16-2013

    "Tied me to the ghost Of underplayed Masculinity"—poetically rich; creatively brilliant!
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    Narrator

    01/16/2013

    Thank you so much for stopping by dah, really appreciated, I am glad you enjoyed it :). All the best, Narrator.

    ginga commented on Dancing Away From Me

    01-15-2013

    A poem that celebrates a new found-couple no matter how attached or detached is certainly viable and provokes my interest.It seems opposites attract. ginga
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    Narrator

    01/15/2013

    Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. Indeed it does seem that two forces, seemingly wholly dissimilar, can be the perfect blend. Thanks again.

    The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

    Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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