Dark embrace

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Dark embrace

Your the darkend slumber,
lightning, thunder, with hate,
inside your eyes.

You feind for blood,darkend lust,
and snack on childrens crys.

You hide in shadows,
Lurk in windows,laugh at peoples sighs,
You are the rude of all evil.
You get off when someone dies.

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ansari commented on Dark embrace

07-18-2010

you said everything which symbolises evil, in a short blunt way . a good write.

nhorlandi commented on Dark embrace

09-22-2009

really a dark one, worst than an horror movie or of Stephen King's

PenofDarkness commented on Dark embrace

09-15-2009

Short; but it has a sweet taste of blood! You said a lot in very few words. Not many writers have that ability. Dark poetry is my passion (as I've noticed you read at least one of my poems). I liked it overall. As far as the feedback you are looking for; based on this poem, you are definitely on the right track--keep on writing more poetry and don't be afraid to read more of others' works. For the more you read, not only will you grow within your own talent, but you will become that much more of who you want to be as an original artist as you pick up the smallest of ideas along the way...

kittman101 commented on Dark embrace

07-13-2009

wow. i cant quite place all the emotions which went into this poem. Because i am seeing the vampirish form, and have a love for them. I can relate to some of the darkness which u placed here. Good work.

soulwriter commented on Dark embrace

05-22-2009

The realness is brought to life in a few selective words, well done. How we dread all that hides in the shadows. Write on write one!

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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