Dear Love, by the time you manifest this poem, you'll be gone.....

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  • Altair
  • Don't read me, I am not that good.......

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Just something I felt like writing....that is all.

Dear Love, by the time you manifest this poem, you'll be gone.....

I'm the suicidal driver within my life
love comes and goes, who's holding the knife?
Cutting ties with my past as none sufficed
to become the most dazzling treasure, my wife.
I'm not saying I give up, but trice paid the price
my heart's poor and can't afford all the mights
the has been's and could Be's, deemed contrite
this write is a fight just to clear my mind.
Wrong is wrong, for love isn't strong
I've  manifested this thought in many a poem
in many a dreamed song the opus burned
set ablaze what my heart strummed in every note strung
in every beat stomped on the ground, they succumb
to the darkest of places, void of my conscious, they run
to the wonderful darkness of tragic rays of sun
the countdown to its demise has begun.........

I never sabotaged any relationship
love is a war, every battle, I wept
loss soldiers in memories saying that it's over
another life is gone, bad blood runneth over........

I've lived this enough to know the dangers of our second guessing
perhaps I'll melt away like sun to snow, learning, yet again, another lesson
perhaps my star is shared with many women, should I care? Should I really seek to know?
I'll answer those questions just read read a bit further, sorry but like love I have to go....... 

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knight4696 commented on Dear Love, by the time you manifest this poem, you'll be gone.....

11-30-2010

Altair my friend .. we have a lot in common pal .. I can so relate to this spectacular write .. written with so much emotion and depth that I felt each stabbing word and each uplifting as well. You certainly can convey as I have told you so many times before .. I sometimes feel that you leave me with a loss of words .. yet such exquisite writing deserves time and attention. Awesome work as usual pal! Heal well and soon! :) Ken

Altair

12/03/2010

Thanks my friend...your comments have been missed

Altair

12/03/2010

Dark star hmmmmm I like that one Lol .....thanks man

WordSlinger commented on Dear Love, by the time you manifest this poem, you'll be gone.....

11-20-2010

This is intense, very. I really like the creativity in this. This poem is like a tattoo, permanant to the mind, great poem, ty WS

Altair

11/23/2010

WS thanks a lot for the comment... Favored indeed

ginga commented on Dear Love, by the time you manifest this poem, you'll be gone.....

11-17-2010

Altair, Your treatise on love is fleeting and it seems that many emotions that are happy are too. I admire your pouring your feelings out and stating what it is that you ponder. ginga

Altair

11/17/2010

Thank you very much dear ginga...

jademelissa74 commented on Dear Love, by the time you manifest this poem, you'll be gone.....

11-09-2010

A woven poem, made of strings of regret, sorrow, longing and acceptance. It feels as if though, a bleeding heart sits patiently on the edge of a cliff, awaiting for a break, for redemption or simply a push to end it's ache. "Perhaps I'll melt away like sun to snow, learning, yet again, another lesson" A powerful line and full of determination. What great piece!

Altair

11/09/2010

Long awaited comment from my favorite ocean....thank You jade

Olan01 commented on Dear Love, by the time you manifest this poem, you'll be gone.....

11-09-2010

You write so fluidly and it always well written to make the reader think and question. I like this poem a lot. Olan.

Altair

11/09/2010

Olan your comments are of the most appreciated flatterings I welcome ...thank you a lot.

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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