• countrychaos
  • Well everyone, three weeks and Im gonna be the father of a baby boy. Words cant describe how excited I am. Also a little scared. Ive posted a song that Im workin on let me know how you like it.

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I honestly don't know where this came from. I just sat down and started writing and this is what came out.



Blood flows from the open wound like pain from a broken heart.

Dim thoughts and faded visions run through her mind, a movie of broken dreams and things left undone.

The voices of her friends and loved ones call to her, seperate sounds meshed together to form a single, soft roar.

Coldness envelops her body with the tenderness of a lovers touch.

Darkness slowly seeps into her eyes as she draws her last breath,

and yet, she feels no pain, for she is free.




                                                             11 Nov 2006                                                                                                 JD

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sammia commented on Death


Wow that was a great write. Most of the time some of our greatest poems we have no idea where they come from. It was short and to the point.

1990lh commented on Death


wow that was short and yet it told a story very beautiful, dark, but beautiful nonetheless, and i so understand when u say this came out of nowhere my poem UNEXPLORED MIND came got of nowhere as well i didnt really undertand the meaning until after i posted ppl start pointing out things and thoughts that they thought the poem repersent so that was new for me hehe u should read i would like to see what u think about that one as well. :0)

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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