Designed

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another very detailed one

Designed

    Curls
And Ringlets
Cinnamon Spirals
Hair of a goddess
Skin like cream
Dreams of a scene
Where your eyes
Twinkled green
Fragmented emeralds
Designed for me... 

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Azzrella commented on Designed

03-26-2013

To the point, some ppl think poems need to be long winded, I disagree.I love it, you've got my Irish coloring down pat! lol!!

am2anangel commented on Designed

10-21-2012

short, simple,detailed, and to the point. would have to agree with diffuse it's missing something. Maybe more passion and personalization. Share your story with us. broaden your details. great concept just needs to be explored further. well done. -Tonya

Diffuse commented on Designed

10-21-2012

yes, its really nice, the description.. but you know, I think you are missing something, because I cant feel the emotion that the description is supposed to inspire. This poem seems to be incomplete.

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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