Dieing Without Knowing

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  • relyt781
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just wrote it on the spot doesnt have to much meaning behind it wrote from the heart and just wrote what came out but doesnt relate to much to my life enjoy =D

Dieing Without Knowing

My heart hits the pavement
My heads in the clouds
still chashing my heart
to the ground
but what's the point
my hearts in two
my heart has broken
splatered
all over the pavement
bloody
as my world turns red
for every ounce of blood in me
came out of my wrist
when you told me
i was nothing
when i was just a person
when i didn't matter
so now i'm half bleeding out on the pavement
and half in the clounds
i'm hurt
i'm pretending
it didn't happen
and living in my wonderful world
in the clouds
while i die
and bleed to death
back here in Hell
on Earth

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dahlusion commented on Dieing Without Knowing

06-15-2010

this is a dark, Gothic-like poem that is written quite well in expression and form; you are real at revealing your emotions, which is the key to becoming a fine poet. Bravo, my friend!

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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