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    • wiskeygirl5090
    • I've been gone for quit some time but I'm back and ready to write more poetry.

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    My sister my dad and I were by my moms side as she took her last breath I wrote this for my beautiful mom R.I.P Diane Marie Young


    The slince in your room,
    You've been sick for so long,
    I sit by your side silently watching,
    Holding your hand.
    I watch as the light in your eyes dim,
    Then the spark was gone,
    In one single breath.

    I tried so hard,
    Not to break down and cry,
    As the tears rolled down my face,
    I try to catch my breath,
    Remembering how
    The light in you eyes went dim.

    My breath catches in my throat,
    I can't believe your really gone,
    I wash your face,
    I pick out your cloths,
    I want you to look prefect
    When you meet God today,
    I wipe my eyes
    As I think back to how
    The light in your eyes went dim!!!

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    combatrider commented on Dim


    People don't always feel the way you do so when you reread and adjust to outsiders, insight some times creeps in. Sorry, I read what you say, not write.

    Pocahantas commented on Dim


    Very emotional. I'm very sorry for your loss. I pray God will comfort you and your family through this extremely difficult time.

    lisaner commented on Dim


    This poem must have been excruciating for you to write- I have experienced this; it is unforgettable. I am sorry for the loss. Good work.

    jj1562 commented on Dim


    wow I can't imagine what that's like but now I don't have to you described it well

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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