Do You Remember?

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What would be the point of life if there was nobody left to remember??? This poem is also a riddle, a very difficult one, so what is the it? The last couple of line gives you the best hint.

Do You Remember?

Do you hear the pitter-pattering on the acidic fields of Arizona?
Do you hear the slow-coasted whisper in the coal-like shadow of the summer’s eve?
Do you hear the stampeding thunder of the day cluttering the streets of gold and linings of sliver?

Do you see the arise of life lifting the darkness and the golden rays serving down on to the sea of tranquility?
Do you see the newly born life striving to the top only to see the lonely nights end?
Do you see the laughter and smiles in the mid day praised no more?

Do you taste the fruits of heaven flowering the fields of memory?
Do you taste the vibrant life of a tree towering the skies and heavens in the morning of sorrow?
Do you taste the wines of life springing out of the sated ground?

Do you feel the gentle rays of life casting down on the slow spring break of a winter’s day?
Do you feel the slow, temperate, cooling breeze of the deepened blue accenting life’s autumn fall?
Do you feel the delicate touch of another’s end comforting the tears of a river’s flow?

Do you smell the slow soothing scent of a flower’s bloom in the rising preview of life?
Do you smell the fragrance of life’s company aroused with passion, dead of meaning and sorrow?
Do you smell the aftermath of life’s end of goals, dreams, visions, and freedoms?

But who is to hear?
But who is to see?
But who is to taste?
But who is to feel?
But who is to Smell?
But who is to remember?

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Life’s aftermath is one of sorrow,
If the goals and dreams are just to borrow…

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Seongwoo commented on Do You Remember?

01-03-2011

You are looking for answer in the endless questions. But we all have a different answer. Well done!

carynontherhine commented on Do You Remember?

08-13-2010

Reading through your poetry and do not recall this write, but I like it! Love your endings! In every one I so look forward to getting to the end because you either bring it all together or you leave the reader questioning. Its great. I do so like the ending about who will remember. Never saw it but I shall get a copy of this from you.

carynontherhine commented on Do You Remember?

07-26-2010

Since this poem is a riddle I shall have to reread this one a couple of times I feel so I shall be a little bit with this comment. You are too much! A true poet in every sense of the word. I am really overwhelmed by your writing and realizing that you really are a natural poet! I am right now feeling so much pride I just want to cry out of joy. So, I shall be back to comment as I have to think and enjoy this feeling because its been so bleak lately that I needed this feel good feeling. Thanks. You must have known without knowing. My true poet John Robert. The only words I have left for now are UNBELIEVABLE.

angel33614

07/26/2010

Not really a riddle, the poem was written from the perspective of mother earth as she looks back on the path of destuction and chaos that has been mankind, long after we are gone, after we destroy the very life blood of our own exsistance. What will be remembered? Who will be there to remember it? Life's after math is one of sorrow if the goals and dreams of mankind are just to borrow... this is the meaning, not really a riddle. Purity of the soul, journey well!!! Angel aka your loving son

SavVySam commented on Do You Remember?

07-18-2010

I am happy that I stopped to re-read appreciate and dwell within these delicate and wondrous lines a while..."Life’s aftermath is one of sorrow, If the goals and dreams are just to borrow…" Love this one! Not sure why the thumbs up is sticking..won't let me leave a thumbs up for you!! So here is another "10" instead! lol;)

SuSpence commented on Do You Remember?

06-28-2010

I loved this one Angel, It reminded me of a Bob Dylan song, called 'A Hard Rain's Gonna Fall.' He once descried it saying that each line in that song was the title to another poem or song, but he would never live long enough to write them all so he put all the titles together and made them into a song of thier own. Also the meaning in the song is akin to your poem. He is talking about the human destruction in the form of a nuclear war, the hard rain falling is the acid rain in the wars aftermath. I feel this is a very similar theme, you are fearing the end of man's existance, and what life will be after we are gone. A very thought provoking write indeed. It's like the tree falling in the woods cliche, does it make a noise if no1 is there to hear it, it does right. I feel the same thing goes with us. We may be gone someday, but we made a hell of a noise. We have beamed the Beatles into the outer regions of space, some galaxy far far away is probably watching some distant satellite feed of The Honeymooners re-runs they are picking up from us Haha. I feel even without us being here, if we are gone, we still made a noise, and someone, something, somewhere will hear it. Hopefully they will see the beauty we created, and the love that many had for one another, and not judge us alone on our faults. Wonderful write as always my friend, Peace and Love. ~Spence

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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