Down to Pieces and Parts

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Down to Pieces and Parts

Down to Pieces and Parts 

How could you

Reduce it

Down to pieces and parts

How could you

Not feel the start of the beat of my heart

 

Where was your soul as our love took flight

Over the darkest ridge and the highest height

The things that you do and the things that you say

Sting my face and my throat and bring tears to my face

 

To you love is only the roll in the hay

To me love is angels soaring at dawn of day

I am sickened with discuss of pieces and parts

Why break me and make me and tear out my heart

 

-M. Jacobs

 

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Marsink commented on Down to Pieces and Parts

01-11-2010

I hear the rending of your heart from a dispassionate encounter. No punches pulled and a great canter to the flow. I wonder if you wrote this in tears.

danmartyjake1

01/11/2010

Thanks for your kind words, tears that fell long ago, the poem was written several years ago and I re-worked it a bit before posting it here. ty

knight4696 commented on Down to Pieces and Parts

01-10-2010

Wow Marion - Felt this one ... Yes men are pigs - it's in our nature .. but I disagree with Aria - I believe both men and woman want both - sex and love ... and when true love is found - they dance together in unison. :) Great write! ...Ken

danmartyjake1

01/11/2010

Of course, you are right, women and men both want sex. I think it is more the route we go about to getting it that is different, maybe. Maybe, also the way that it is remembered or appreciated could differ somewhat between males and females. But I have found here on OP a lot of poets that relate to it very similarly as I do, and they are men. So that is refreshing! Thanks for your supportive words.

koolmom0 commented on Down to Pieces and Parts

01-07-2010

I think we have all been there!! Your heart does mend, it takes time, but in due time you find true love. Awesome write hun. Kool

dahlusion commented on Down to Pieces and Parts

01-07-2010

"To you love is only the roll in the hay To me love is angels soaring at dawn of day I am sickened with discuss of pieces and parts Why break me and make me and tear out my heart" WOW!! Enough said.

danmartyjake1

01/07/2010

Dah, Thanks for reading and commenting and you exactly got the gist of my words. It's frustrating sometimes when love is reduced to mere pieces and parts and not exalted for what it truly captures and all that it can be. Thanks.

bklynrizz commented on Down to Pieces and Parts

01-06-2010

I feel that mans maturity level has been retarded indefinitely, thanks in part to sports and video games. Your poem reminded me of that. To you love is only a roll in the hay - points out how, today, sex is commonly mistaken for love and love for sex. Excellent poem.

danmartyjake1

01/07/2010

Correct deduction and to many, speaking for myself, sex is an avenue to spiritual heights, not merely a physical release, although the physical sensation is pleasing, the spiritual realms reached during it are much more exciting for me. Thanks for reading my poem and understanding it in such a deep way.

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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