Dreamimg

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Dreamimg

dreaming
dreaming of what i could be
dreaming of what others see
dreaming of my true identity
dreaming of what portrays me

wishing
wishing for the dream to come true
wishing to show it to you
wishing you could join me too
wishing i could know what to do

thinking
thinking of how i can achieve
thinking of what to believe
thinking of the love i can concieve
thinking of who i might leave

believing
believing that it will be ok
believing that it will start today
believing you will show me the way
believing it will stay

dreaming
of a dream
wishing
of what it seems
thinking
i'm doing it right
believing
that i just might
dream

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WhiteKnight commented on Dreamimg

06-02-2009

well done. many of us feel like this holds true. it feels like our life is a dream and we wish either to wake up or for it to change. ryan

Penname commented on Dreamimg

05-25-2009

I would make some minor changes like removing the word "of" where it detracts from the rhythm of the verse. But it's good over all.

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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