Dreaming

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    I wrote this for a very good friend of mine that plays guitar.

    Dreaming

    I had a dream, but it wasn't about you.
    I guess even my dreams can't be as lovely.
    There was someone there representing my heart
    as a ball and chain.
    And I keep thinking about the way he was swinging it.
    Life on a tour bus-
    my imagination goes wild.
    With thoughts of exotic drinks, cigarettes, and unconscious groupies.
    You were there all along, waiting for me to burn out.
    My self pride has been lost as I dive into the lyrics of your life.
    Where you've been.
    Where you're going.
    I can't stop and wish on stars anymore.
    Because I am up there with them.
    The darkness makes me cave in until
    I open my eyes
    and it all goes away.
    I never once stopped thinking about you.
    I guess our last gig was a success
    as I pick up beer bottles from the bus floor.
    There are pictures on the wall of people I had to leave behind
    so I could meet the ones I know today.
    They tell me it's all a process.
    As my heart harmonizes like a voice,
    yours strums on beautiful frets of blue.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    Qualin commented on Dreaming

    02-26-2010

    I CAN RELATE TO THIS VERY WELL THE BASICS...BEEN THERE..NOT TO SUCH AN EXTREME MET MANY PEOPLE STILL DO GOOD WRITE...WHERE DID YOU COME UP WITH THIS...QUALIN

    BringMeBullets

    03/02/2010

    Ha ha. Thank you very much. It comes from the depths of my mind (which is a rather scary though, really). Thank you.

    danmartyjake1 commented on Dreaming

    02-10-2010

    Oh yes, "your's strums on beautiful fretts of blue" this is so interesting as an ending to a wonderful story and many of us know that it's not all what's it's cracked up to be, your poem states it perfectly.

    BringMeBullets

    02/11/2010

    Thank you so much. I like that line too. :)

    dahlusion commented on Dreaming

    02-02-2010

    Brandi love, your ability to control your reader from the very moment of contact with your words is sheer writer's brilliance. This piece is a story that I wanted to be in, to be a part of --- I could smell the stale beer, the exotic cigs. Powerful!!

    BringMeBullets

    02/03/2010

    Thank you, again, from the bottom of my heart. That's always what I go for. Thank you for reading.

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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