Elemental portance in alchemic relevance..


  • Altair
  • Don't read me, I am not that good.......

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Just a meek ode to what nature is....we can never truly grasp all the greatness, but it is wonderful to try..

Elemental portance in alchemic relevance..

The earth, the wind, the waters blend
immaculate fires within ascend
Lets take a journey in charactered trend...

Hello earth of ground circumstances in your birth
as HIS word dispersed in creating your worth
I was there, a soul, whom watched you grow
from lava flows beneath rocks supposed
crumble and tumbled metaphysical boost
what a wonder in excellent atomic throws
thus rose the spectacle, so felt with the toes
upon its natural formation, the rose shows
that the earth is love thus supported enclosed
closed the seams in formation it weaved
land perceived by the astral being
celestial team of the sun and moon beams
down upon this entity, igniting a scene
in the future amongst it the trees and sea's
All his sentient beings for us to achieve
his destiny of foreseen gestures to see
a paradise imitation that could one day be
for all of us in eternal glee...

With the company of the wind that loves to transcend
hello and goodbye as you pass me again
Me, the soul, still hovers as friend
wondering how you exist as nothing
but always something that moves all things
your quiet whispers and strong contain
but so playful as you sway the rain
and the leaves of trees or the lions mane
you may have existed before your friend
the earth, the land, you push the sand
I love your company, love so grand
souls hovering your lovely, movement again
When you speak with your beautiful plan
all the metaphor and similes collect and commend
Allah has made you to be recognized
as the disguise of beauty surmised
as the trial of supported guile
that exist around things, lets dance awhile
my soul floats internally, chaotic smile
but this is our nature, as the poem compile
relevance to your gestures, lets stop for now...

Crash upon me waters of flowing metaphors
existing is you of varied contours
more and more your dimensions soar
sore to great lengths to share in rapport
with my wandering soul of deep allure
what a beautiful sight is your massive valor
blues, greens, darkened in the night your color
shining upon you, your awesome view
the sun and moon alike as they reflect upon you
lakes and rivers, ravines of plethora
share in likeness of gorgeous water
life so plush around Oceania
I think I’m in love as we flow together
your likeness calm in many cases
until the wind shows your many faces
in many places the earth extends
you a platform to spread again
natural chaos my friend I commend
such power in your girth, must share and blend
water O water, unidentical twin
of the wind and earth, Allah's command
but there is one more relative bend
in this poem of your opposite mysticism

Fire O Fire, of loving attire
you were created with intrinsic power
your chaos is the beautiful martyr
destroying and creating as you ash the empire
rising and falling, unrelenting flame
much like my soul that mimics your bane
but you have a soft nature, not to touch with the hand
the heat you proclaim, we beseech to contain
The game you play as you lay in silence
is not to be played by the meek in nonsense
weak in content till the wind alarms it
that it must spread over earth in potence
like my soul when this vessel opens
leaving it torched in existential focus
but you are no match for the calming opus
of water, your opposite, perfect solace
you don’t hate the power of your twin to calm you
connected as two, you falter in rue
fire O fire, higher and higher
reaching to my soul again, the Gaia
let her breathe unto you in a windful brew
as earth becomes anew, let the flow carry you...

Earth, wind, water, and fire together
perfect elements exist forever
in this plethora, we shall be better
taught in Allah's court, alchemy in tether...

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knight4696 commented on Elemental portance in alchemic relevance..


Altair .. Again you never cease to amaze me. Your words are always so carefully chosen and the rhyming impeccable. This poem of earthly creation, destruction and rebirth is a beautiful, spiritual and powerful piece. Another awesome work by the aster of metaphor! :) Ken

SuperChick76 commented on Elemental portance in alchemic relevance..


The beauty of the creations about us that we oft times do not allow ourselves to see, or care for... You caught them beautifully, though mayhap now as beautiful they are, but 'twas among the closest I have been able to see on page to describe they beauty of nature... I loved it, dear. :)

dreamscape commented on Elemental portance in alchemic relevance..


*sigh* all I can do is shake my head when I read your work, Altair you always seem to take my breath away, especially when you create masterpieces like this. I sometimes wonder what it would be like to exist in the minds of some poets and/or writers, and it is safe to say that you may be at the top of that list in many regards lol. Awesome awesome writing.

ginga commented on Elemental portance in alchemic relevance..


Altair, Science, existence, elements, its all in here and what a grand and colossal merging of facts and revelations. I love how you keep the same rhyme ending for a while then switch it out with another one. This is a skill that not all poets have. Mesmerizing. ginga

Marsink commented on Elemental portance in alchemic relevance..


I've not read such eloquence of profound thought put to description of what are seeming commonplace elements! None of which must be taken for granted, and neither should we take our beating heart for granted, either : 'for in Him we have our movement and our being'. Bright and bold as usual!

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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