exposed

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    the artwork for this poem is a painting that i did which inspired me to write the poem which inturn inspired me to finish the painting... both are titled exposed

    exposed

    winter wind creeps in
    freezing the skin
    the snow falls in the wrong direction
    horizontal...
    blasting across exposed flesh
    like sand and gravel


    a bitterness that appears to strip...
    the flesh from the fingertips
    rose red welts on the face and hands
    from the whipping winds
    upon the skin

    drawing tears
    stinging the eyes
    clotting the nose
    pulling the breath out of my throat


    alone i have trudged through the snow
    frozen are my feet
    for miles i have traveled to end up here
    nowhere...
    now here in the snow
    i sit naked and alone
    frozen and exposed

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    Oblaidon commented on exposed

    04-16-2010

    You paint a vivid picture. I like how you ended this one with metaphoric ending.

    Fallenangel87 commented on exposed

    04-11-2010

    Damn, The imagery in this is awesome, Keep it up. You're talented. -Fallenangel 87-

    Dano

    04/12/2010

    thank you for your kind words

    MarionYost commented on exposed

    03-31-2010

    The ending is great, Originally from P.A. I know all about the brutal winter storms.. And EVERYONE can relate to the "Being Alone & exposed", Great Job. All the best -Marion-

    Dano

    04/07/2010

    thank you

    danmartyjake1 commented on exposed

    02-28-2010

    Great poem describing the brutality of winter and dark pieces of self, too.

    Dano

    02/28/2010

    thank you for taking the time read...

    ginga commented on exposed

    02-24-2010

    Dano, I love all the sensuous overtones in this poem of trial, determination (to get somewhere) and the "raw" facts about ole man winter. You might enjoy my poem Winter Walk. ginga

    Dano

    02/25/2010

    thanks ginga...

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

    Dano’s Poems (150)

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