Feedback Gone Awry

Some of your verses get a little tongue tied,so........                                                                                       Iron out the flow with care,                                                                                            The poem will all but glow,...                                                                                           Counting syllables is second nature,...                                                                                          I thought I`d let you know,..                                                                                             Poetic, savory, wordy recipe,...                                                                                           Great metaphor abounds,...                                                                                    Measure its lines closely,..                                                                                        To serve tasty, phonic sounds...
Its true, some folks dont like to rhyme
And say it is beneath them
Far too artsy to be curtailed
By such a fussy, restrictive detail
To you I say that thats ok... if you want to get off
into a puzzling
rambling dis-jointed kinda artsy thing, that we
all must endure, written in ebonic prose
whos meter be off da hook wit
metaphor lacking the way a first generation japanese car
used to be that we all laughed at and shit.......aight den
Great job! Loved it! I give it a solid 10...