Feedback Gone Awry


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    Feedback Gone Awry

    Some of your verses get a little tongue tied,so........                                                                                       Iron out the flow with care,                                                                                            The poem will all but glow,...                                                                                           Counting syllables is second nature,...                                                                                          I thought I`d let you know,..                                                                                             Poetic, savory, wordy recipe,...                                                                                           Great metaphor abounds,...                                                                                    Measure its lines closely,..                                                                                        To serve tasty, phonic sounds...
    Its true, some folks dont like to rhyme
    And say it is beneath them
    Far too artsy to be curtailed
    By such a fussy, restrictive detail
    To you I say that thats ok... if you want to get off
    into a puzzling
    rambling dis-jointed kinda artsy thing, that we
    all must endure, written in ebonic prose
    whos meter be off da hook wit
    metaphor lacking the way a first generation japanese car
    used to be that we all laughed at and shit.......aight den
    Great job! Loved it! I give it a solid 10...

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    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

    rougepriest’s Poems (11)

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    Chapter 34 1
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    Deaths Tendril 9
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