First, Second, and Third...?

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This is a the story of my first real love, and first real loss. Also, as much as I hate to admit it, my mild addiction to and ceaseless (and largely useless) hope with the same girl. This is a very personal piece, but I love the work too much not to share it.

First, Second, and Third...?

I think back to how we first met
A seemingly shy "hello" on my screen
Numbers and names passed by a friend
On that day, something beautiful grew

I know well your arm's sweet embrace
The beautiful way you first said hello
Gathering me into your body
Seeming like you'd never let me go

I smile when I picture our hands
Coming together for the very first time
Fingers so delicately entwined
With a loving squeeze every so often

I can still feel our first kiss
Planted firmly on my eager lips
Curiousity grew slowly into passion
And we explored each other so joyously

I remember fondly the day on which
We first said our sheepish 'I love you's
So nervous and scared in the best way
But happier than we ever were before

I can recall when you said goodbye
That we could be together no more
How I desperately pulled myself together
And tried to grasp for another heart

I feel her first embraces again
As well as her hand softly pressed in mine
The first kiss we shared together
None of them could compare to yours

I reexperience the glorious day
When you came back to me
She was long gone in my life
And I foolishly sought your love again

I am happy to remember your "yes"
When I asked if you wanted me back
Such a joy ran through my veins
It seemed as if I could fly

I feel such a fool when I recall
The day you said a second try won't work
Tears poured down my miserable face
My world had just collapsed

I tear up just a little bit
When I remember my months without you
Though it pained us both horribly
The thought of you ate me up inside

I smirk a little bit to recall
The time I agreed to be a friend again
It was what felt right, as it should
And I know your frienship is a blessing

I couldn't hate you if I wanted to
Despite all the pain you gave me
It seems we can only grow closer together
Just friends for now, but maybe someday...

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Rhymer commented on First, Second, and Third...?

08-21-2010

Such a wonderful write, reading your work is akin to riding a roller coaster, a thrill around each bend. 10

ApaqRasgirl commented on First, Second, and Third...?

08-18-2010

that was a very loving, sweet passionate write dear....your words flowed with it so smooth.......loved it.....this is now my fav of today.....thanks for this wonderful read......love asha

ImStillHere commented on First, Second, and Third...?

08-18-2010

wow... Devvy this poem is so... god. its perfect...

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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