Floating Rock (Terza Rima)

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    Iambic Tetrameter. I had originally written it in trimeter then i reread the assignment and fixed it. Poem 11A

    Floating Rock (Terza Rima)


    It floats as gently as a feather
    It goes again from side to side
    It does not want to leave the ether;

    This rock about thirteen miles wide
    Descends the sky as if it’s but
    A bubble boat in tranquil tide.

    It’s making every man a nut;
    The place it goes not one can go
    The zig the zag, so is its strut

    It’s coming we certainly know;
    Such spectacle that all can see,
    One brimming with smirky glow

    That spans the times from birth in sea:
    It has the skeletons of days
    Those of the past and those to be,

    But would it give us murky haze
    Or give us light in places cold,
    Or maybe it improves by blaze

    As gold. Is it to love, to scold -
    The human race is very bad
    As told… Is it to push, to hold?

    Is such the fate the dino’s had
    That they are not with us today?
    Although our time’s been just a tad
    Although compelling is the sway
    What really causes the delay?

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    WordSlinger commented on Floating Rock (Terza Rima)

    05-29-2010

    Awesome, complete mastery, that last question, is awesome, I have the answer, lol yep, I love this one, wisdom in a poem, lol, ty WS

    leslieAlexis

    05/29/2010

    :). Thank you Slinger. :). I'm going to get to you.

    RHPeat commented on Floating Rock (Terza Rima)

    05-26-2010

    (thirteen) is one of those tricky words. Thing you might look at: Maybe (a nut). A trochee in L12 & L13. Look up redemp'tion. You have a problem there. A poet friend/ RH Peat

    leslieAlexis

    05/26/2010

    Edited professor :). Thank you!

    Springsize commented on Floating Rock (Terza Rima)

    05-11-2010

    Hi leslieAlexis, I am here to critique your latest poem, a changing rhyme scheme of tercets. I note immediately that you have been successful with the form, of perfect line count and the rhyme change. Your beginning, turning point and full circle are good, and your message is the look of human behavior and the choices made. Interesting analogy you have used with the same comet hurling toward Earth now, as the one that many in the scientific community consider to be the cause of the dinosaurs extinction... although they were not as deserving, as is the selfish behavior of "advanced and evolved" human kind.

    leslieAlexis

    05/31/2010

    Thank you super S.

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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