Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poet
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Assignment # 2, Another Tercet (Mourning)
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetHi Folks, Last edited by gmcookie 07-29-2010 at 11:33:51 AM |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetRon, |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetCongratulations Ron!! That is great news - I will definitely add it to my small but growing collection |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetCongradulations Peat, |
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Question on exercise 8Mr. Peat... |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetHey Mentors and Friends... It has been so long since I've been here. I don't know if my reason counts as a good reason or if there is such a thing.. but I have my reason... Last edited by leslieAlexis 09-13-2010 at 01:46:17 PM |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetSo professor the antithesis in this case would be the 'resting' in comparison to tumbling? |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetThank you! simple? but not so simple. |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetAmen. I agree fully... It's like a fance restaurant dish that cost a million bucks, yet is a small portion. The work that goes into it to make it what it is give it the value... not it's size. |
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RE: RE: Aria’s haikuExcellent haiku! The line "Her flanks wet with sweat" struck me a very sensual - Quote:
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RE: RE: Aria’s haikuQuote: So... beautiful image. \ About following the rules, I don't see a specific kigo. You have a nice constrast between galloping and setting... where one is moving and the other coming to rest. Overall very nice.. now... put in a kigo.  Les
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RE: RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetQuote: [/b]
Originally Posted by Forestbird I just found this very interesting and educational thread. I wrote this poem without any knowledge about anaphors but probably they are present here. Mountain and Desert Should I climb the mountain to reach your heart? All the paths are rocky and slope is steep But the air is crystal and sky is blue Should I climb the mountain to reach your heart? Should I go through the desert to touch your hand? Even heat is exhausting and send is dry But the stars are the brightest there at night Should I go through the desert to touch your hand? No… I only have to jump in my car And drive for an hour to come to your place And just fall in your arms and forget the world Yes I only have to jump in my car I am sure I’ll be able to touch your hand But it’s not that easy to reach your heart Only hour of driving --easy way But the Mountain and Desert still in place… Forestbird Nicely composed quatrains, indicating that you have caught on to the anaphora. . Ask Peat to crtitque your poem. I don't want to suggest that you could have devised the last two stanzas to maintain consistency of the anaphora and style throughout the entire poem. Nice little love poem. Last edited by cousinsoren 09-26-2010 at 07:50:08 AM |
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RE: RE: RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetQuote: Originally Posted by cousinsoren Originally Posted by Forestbird [/b]I just found this very interesting and educational thread. I wrote this poem without any knowledge about anaphors but probably they are present here. Mountain and Desert Should I climb the mountain to reach your heart? All the paths are rocky and slope is steep But the air is crystal and sky is blue Should I climb the mountain to reach your heart? Should I go through the desert to touch your hand? Even heat is exhausting and send is dry But the stars are the brightest there at night Should I go through the desert to touch your hand? No… I only have to jump in my car And drive for an hour to come to your place And just fall in your arms and forget the world Yes I only have to jump in my car I am sure I’ll be able to touch your hand But it’s not that easy to reach your heart Only hour of driving --easy way But the Mountain and Desert still in place… Forestbird Nicely composed quatrains, indicating that you have caught on to the anaphora. . Ask Peat to crtitque your poem. I don't want to suggest that you could have devised the last two stanzas to maintain consistency of the anaphora and style throughout the entire poem. Nice little love poem. The poem has a more extreme form of anaphora in that it has "repetons" as found in the villanelle and terzenelle. Anaphoras is a repition at the beginning not the entire lines. The poem is lovely. |
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RE: RE: RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetQuote: Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by leslieAlexis So professor the antithesis in this case would be the 'resting' in comparison to tumbling? or in the air and on the ground: resting & tumbling/ in opposition: mirroring inferred: cold and dead/ conjoined in surrender. Giving way. Seasons: flowing into one another/ autumn into winter. Leaves fall, yet it is cold night air. The grace of the oak is steadfast throughout its seasons and years. Much is inferred with real antithesis that convey feelings to the reader that looks for the depth hidden within the images. Haiku like a Sonnet can be very deep in its presentation. a poet friend RH Peat ******************************************************************************************************_____________ This is brief, lucid and competently analytical, Ron. No beating around thew bush! |
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RE: RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetQuote: Originally Posted by Springsize Thank you RHPeat ... for this exercise in Nature and pen control ... and I hope that I have come close to the Haiku Kigu Form ... the cold is aching within dormant seeds and bones to move and find warmth what is your real name? The haiku is on point. It has all the essential parts... |
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RE: RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetQuote: Originally Posted by Springsize Thank you RHPeat ... for this exercise in Nature and pen control ... and I hope that I have come close to the Haiku Kigu Form .... the cold is aching within dormant seeds and bones to move and find warmth Beautiful dear, love the Haiku, glad the picture worked out for you........love asha |
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RE: RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetQuote: Originally Posted by RHPeat Remember not to use the class as a discussion page. Post on critiques on your critique page and poems on your poem page. a poet friend RH Peat I'm sorry RH, I think I am a bit confused with your comment, if I take this class are you saying we don't post our poems here we post and critique them on our own pages......thanks love asha |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetA thought you might ponder: |
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RE: Working toward the sonnet/starting as the novice poetHello, and welcome to my poetry thread. Thank you all who take the time to read and comment on my work. I always appreciate your thoughts and your honesty. Last edited by JanetGunn 03-10-2011 at 11:35:49 AM |
Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.
Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.