Haiku (God's Brush)
Abstract CreationColor seen through tinted eyes
Inner fluid red
Written In Response to UPA Picture Challenge: What do you see.
In Haiku Format
Marcus Lewis
6/28/2009
Haiku (God's Brush)
10 Comments
Tags: Haiku
Poem Commentary
This attempt at Haiku poetry was written in response to the UPA Challenge: (What do you see). This is my first attempt at Haiku, and I would appreciate any and all criticism on this.I was trying to bring out the fact that these animals saw themselves as neither white, nor black. Their color did not affect their friendship. Why does it have to affect ours?
Thanks,
Marcus
Color seen through tinted eyes
Inner fluid red
Written In Response to UPA Picture Challenge: What do you see.
In Haiku Format
Marcus Lewis
6/28/2009
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Poem Comments
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Marsink commented on Haiku (God's Brush)
10-26-2009
- Just curious, Marcus, is that a description of an Albino? (can't tell from the picture) This is a true color 'picture in words'! I wrote some haiku you may like, and some nature naratives, and about doubt and love. Please come by and drop a line about my lines. btw,my name is Marck
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cowboyup1824 commented on Haiku (God's Brush)
07-20-2009
- I like this it's simple but very descriptive. It makes you think about life and everything we see as different. Everyone in deed is created differently and yet we are to blind to see that no matter what we look like we all bleed red because we all are one in the same person! Well done
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07/20/2009
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BrielleC commented on Haiku (God's Brush)
07-10-2009
- Very interesting take to this picture! great perspective! Haiku seesm so simple, but it is an art for sure!
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07/10/2009
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Jackie commented on Haiku (God's Brush)
07-07-2009
- Worthy, hello I just checked to see how Haiku is... the abstract is the monkey & it have red eyes... what happen on the last time because does not want me to go back there... please read My 1st attempt of Writing a Sonnet... the Title is "Constructive Criticism". & read another when u have time
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07/08/2009
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latinangel commented on Haiku (God's Brush)
07-07-2009
- I agree very beautiful imagery in so few words. I love the title especially. I have never been an outdoor type of person but as I get older I find myself longing for sunshine and looking at my surroundings with new eyes. That is what this reminds me of, looking at things with new eyes, appreciating God's touch in everything we see. Wow! You see how much this affected me? Great job Marcus Vanessa
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07/08/2009
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