Heart-less

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Discouraging words can break even the most positive of people

Heart-less

Losing confidence in myself
By all of the words that feel
More like wounds to my soul-

Positive thinking took over
At first, but one letter was all
It took by someone who hated
Me-to discourage me and
Make me lose all of
The faith and determination
In who I am-Lord what do you
Do when everyone around is
Always talking badly about you?

To your face, they say such
Discouraging things like,
You will fail or You will
Never make it! Feelings of doubt
And depression are overwhelming
And I just can’t take it! The higher
Criticisms and Debaucheries of my
Days tends to steal my joys, my
Smiles away from me. Help is what
I need to go on, just one word from
You is what I need to continue
My journey-Or else, I will faint
Before I reach my destination….

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Insideme commented on Heart-less

03-21-2011

This is honesty at its best in poetic form, simplicity is the key to good writing and you've certainly done this here....I want you to read my poem Rise Above, it is my answer to those who would be so cruel. I wrote this sometime ago but I think it fits the situation you are describing .......Love and Freewill my friend.

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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