Heartborn Parasite

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    another thing just trying to get stuff off my chest. . .i know its not the best. . .help is goooood

    Heartborn Parasite

    Away, even when I’m here

    My heart drained of all its love

    Soul gone and mind dying

    Paltry body still remains.

    I give, you take.

    I love, you hate.

    You stole my heart

    And so my life

    Slowly Becomes

    Ever

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    Gracey commented on Heartborn Parasite

    10-19-2009

    You dont need help! this is perfect as it is....I love the style. "Ever More Empty." It makes you read them slowly so you can get a feel for how drained your sole is............that probably doesn't make sense LOL but this is good :) 10 from me (Y)
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    cmlestrade commented on Heartborn Parasite

    08-14-2009

    This was great, I read a similar poem a few minutes ago by another poet but this has what was lacking. This was loss sadness expressed with no mundane phrases and childish pettines. Great submission, keep them coming.
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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