Hiaku

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    Haiku i made in Writing class

    Hiaku

    Baby sister walks
    Off ballance and slow she goes
    stumbling every step

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    spbsdude commented on Hiaku

    12-13-2010

    How true it is when they take that first step and what a precious moment to catch in words so aptly put. A very nice Haiku.

    angelchaser commented on Hiaku

    12-10-2010

    I LOVE haiku's, I've written over 200 of them and this one is good, I love it:)

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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