Hideous Sue

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    Hideous Sue

    Can you stop thinking about me?

    I can’t stop thinking about you

    I need to build and tone

    Strengthen and melt away

    For you, some day

    I’m pudgy around the edges

    I swear, you can’t tell where my head is

    These fat rolls got me down

    So so low I’m on the ground

    Too heavy for the Earth to carry

    On top of that, I’m also hairy

    You’d like me if you saw me naked

    Just without, like, half of my body parts

    And a different nose

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    Insideme commented on Hideous Sue

    02-21-2011

    This is what real poetry is made up of, honesty no matter what...Poetry is what comes out of us and it doesnt have to be in any kind of order or pattern, just as long as it is an expression true to what you think or feel which you have done perfectly,,,,keep it up!
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    WordSlinger commented on Hideous Sue

    06-19-2010

    This really makes on wonder, this is an art a poem in a very different way, cool to me, TY WS
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    DrewMcNee commented on Hideous Sue

    05-23-2010

    Nice sense of humor. You might want to consider using a prose style with less emphasis on rhyme. I like your thinking. The ending is brilliant!
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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