Adventure of Love (Villanelle)

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    Poem number 12. It is written in Iambic tetrameter.

    Adventure of Love (Villanelle)

     I love you dearest wife of mine
    And passing times say love grows more.
    Within my heart, I’ve built a shrine

    For love, and all the stock is thine
    To take -- to fill it’s thine to pour.
    I love you dearest wife of mine

    Like winds, this love is not clandestine,
    Like seas, of love, you can be sure
    Within my heart, I’ve built a shrine.

    And to my tongue, there is a line
    That brings the freshness from the store.
    I love you dearest wife of mine

    Whose lips do sooth far more than wine,
    Who gives her love with joy galore.
    Within my heart, I’ve built a shrine.

    My Love, my love I can’t define,
    Each time I think of you I soar
    I love you dearest wife of mine
    Within my heart, I’ve built a shrine.

    Edited. :)

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    Springsize commented on Adventure of Love (Villanelle)

    06-01-2010

    leslieAlexis... This poem is from your heart and sounds like it... good job of going inside and finding a STRONG and reverent feeling and putting it to your pen. As per the mechanics of this poem, I note that line 8 rhyme "sure" is a bad shoe fit, and does not quite rhyme. But... the rest is excellent and this is one of the hardest poems, I thought... having to repeat the first lines throughout the stanzas and keep the meaning flowing... and you did do this. Line 7 still has one too many syllables...
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    WordSlinger commented on Adventure of Love (Villanelle)

    05-29-2010

    Like I said in the last poem your word, stands, with the mighty King-Love, ty WS
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    leslieAlexis

    05/29/2010

    :). RH helped lots with this poem. Thank you much.

    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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