if at all

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    im not even sure anymore

    if at all

    Lyin caged up in my sorrow

    keeping secrets to myself

    I didnt think anyone would follow

    I didnt think anyone would help

    my heart seemed to have fallen

    broken down to disrepair

    I was lost to my own heartbreak

    so far gone I couldnt tell

     

    hold my hand and bring me back

    only you can find me now

    all the others who have tried

    seemed to lose themselves in time

    guide me from this black abyss

    show me what all I have missed

    guard this careless heart of mine

    so I wont lose myself this time

     

    wondering so aimlessly

    watching others I can see

    how far lost I really am

    so far gone I cannot stand

    pick me up and carry me

    show me what im ment to be

    what will I have to do

    to let you know what I went through

     

    if at all

    if I fall
    can you find me?
    can you save me?

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    Chrisjan commented on if at all

    07-21-2019

    Yes you can be saved !! This is a sad poem about the world's pressures on someone. Where is the breaking point, getting saved !! Christ Jesus is there. A free gift. Just ask Jesus to be your savior and guidance. That simple. I have been in this type of meltdown. I pray all is better !!
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    brokenhearted11 commented on if at all

    12-24-2010

    the poem holds a certain rhythm, one that everyone can understand and know, and i like that. the emotions run high in this poetry, and i can tell its autobiographical. my favorite lines: guard this careless heart of mine/ so I wont lose myself this time. oh, and if you need to talk, seeing as this is a bit dark, my door is always open. keep writing
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    amithissecret

    12/25/2010

    this isnt as dark as 'the girl iuse to be' thanks though

    papapaczki commented on if at all

    12-23-2010

    I like how you turned a negative feeling into a positive situation, looking to return your happy place.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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