if you Think... check what you know...

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if you Think... check what you know...




i am  yours.
 without conditions
 the changes i make
 for you
 are
my choices
 as is
what
 are
our
choices
i
we
you
 trust each
other
both
better than we trust
anyone else
or
any
other
in
a better start
than most
humanity has ever
chosen...

Honest
Total:
Love
Lust
and Absolute
Trust
 anything
less
is
less
than
worthless
dust

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JadedJezzabel commented on if you Think... check what you know...

10-20-2010

this is a style of poetry that i adore......and its not so easy to do either.....this poem screams that you are going to fight for what you believe in ...in a relationship you know cannot be replaced by not fighting.........love it

wamomo commented on if you Think... check what you know...

10-18-2010

I love this!! Wow! The intensity that you put out in such brevity is just...wow! This poem says sooo much about the healthy relationship as it should be. Excellent write!

nightsky commented on if you Think... check what you know...

05-24-2010

These facts that you list are a most delightful capture of the ear, mind, and heart. Listening to it with my eyes closed, searching for the words that respond....Absolute trust......and the wonderful ( and mysterious) " a better start than most humanity has ever chosen. A better start...than humanity's ever chosen." Startling pronouncement....the thought lingers...'than humanity's ever chosen." Your poem feels like an endless path, or a bright star in the sky! :)

purdylox commented on if you Think... check what you know...

04-28-2010

the ending is great it is very good........................................

Alyse commented on if you Think... check what you know...

04-23-2010

The last section is wonderful, and absolutely true

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

origionalmerlin’s Poems (66)

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Center of everything...
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4
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Gods' Hat Size 3
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I am a Chef 3
For Your Information..
.
4
Smiling 6
my wish 20
anything less... 7
the choice is us 8
one whole we 9
from a text message to whom i Love 10
if you Think... check what you know... 10
see you always 5
less than half an hour till ...seeing you 2
chocolate mousse cookies and eternity (whichever lasts longer) 5
Oregano The Difference 6
Stainless Union 14
scrambled eggs and the future for breakfast 13
Yes , and Yes Again ! 9
The Birth of the Queen 18
The Queens Repose 33
The Pissed Piskeys Prank 27
little dream 24
Cause The Music To Play 14
Long Live origionalpoet
ry.com
12
Pounding Lust 13
Typo Blues 15
Closest Call (part 2 (not fiction or a poem) 1
Closest Call (part 1 (not fiction or a poem) 1
Whisper 2
Enlightenment 1
When She Loves Me 6
All Night 1
Till Your Mind Melts Away (1. warmup) 3
Wings 3
Angels shall sing thee to rest 1
The Coming Of The Queen 0
Mnogiye veshi ( Russian) 1
Dyerzhi moi ruki 1
Momenti lyubvi 1
Now I lay me... 4
meloncholics annonomous 3
Sorry Dante 12
Moments With You. 10
Many Things 4
If the World were a Bed 10
Eternity 16
From the Dream We Soon Shall Awake 22
"All Night AS Well" 10
Presently 3
Eye, I, Aye (bluestoneeat
er collection #1)
5
The Touch Within 11
(at the stone of never ending) 8
Marathon 4
Flowers 7
Camelot 16
OZ isn't me 12
Hold my hand often 22
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Momenti , {Moments of Love } 11
unspoken connotations 9
Coffee and Sex 30
To Kiss a star 33