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--the picture was drawn by Dawn Marie Black


If you were the stars, and I was the moon,

I’d hug you to make the darkness seem bright.

If I were a gardener, and you were a flower,

I’d put the sun above your delicate petals.

If I were the sea, and you were a fish,

I’d make my waters safe for you.

If I were the sky, and you were a cloud,

I’d make my vast body blue and clear.

If I were the wind, and you were the snow,

I’d let you fall to the ground with grace.

If you were a candle, and I were the flame,

I would never die out.

If I were a mountain, and you were the sun,

My peak would always touch you.

If. . . . .

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ginga commented on If


JACOB, I like what you did here with the word "if." Believe it or not I won the weekly contest with a poem titled "IF" and it was not one of my blockbuster poems, but a thinking outside the box style poem that the judges liked. You are writing maturely for a young poet. Keep up the good work. ginga



Yes, I read that one, very good! I thought the idea was so original and unique. It was a fun poem to read. A well-deserved win! Thank you for the kind words. Really. --Natalie.

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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