IMPERFECT PARADISE

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    IMPERFECT PARADISE

                       "The day is young", so am always told,
                      But as the years go by, Earth has not become old,
                      Our World can be beautiful,
                      But life can also be miserable,
                      Adam, first born of creation,
                      By Eve, ate the evil fruit of temptation,
                      Leading to miseries and imperfection,
                      With a wail,i say "Man 'o' man, I call the Earth an  
                      imperfect  paradise",
                      And the consequence,Sin,is in us like a parasite.
                     

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    FranzJ commented on IMPERFECT PARADISE

    01-10-2011

    a ture obversation - it is because of sin that earth seems imperfect - out day will come and it will become perfect
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    joanna

    03/09/2011

    Amen Frank................AMEN!!!!!!!!!

    Chaos128 commented on IMPERFECT PARADISE

    07-18-2009

    A compact conclusion, deftly arrived at. Can the damage done been corrected? I have to think so, or we'd all just be part of a puppet play with no real hope or purpose. Nicely told, Joanna.
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    joanna

    08/10/2009

    Thank you so much!! this poem was written when i was 13......wondering why we suffer for 2 people's mistake....thank God for His Son....maybe i will write a poem on the "perfect paradise". by the way , ur photo looks great!!! later

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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