In a Flash

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Here is a quote by a teen that had an abortion: Although I still have the ultrasound it still brings back memories that hurt me. Remember that you have the power to say no because you are the one that will have to make the appointment…not your mother, not your father, you. Just remember that and plan ahead for your child’s future because being a mommy is a huge responsibility. The abortion even affected my mom although she didn’t want me to have him. I know she would have helped me now. So in the end abortion is not right. So R.I.P. to My Baby…Mommy loves you……….

In a Flash

A walking zombie
All but dead inside
Heard a heart beating
Her caring had died

 

As read in a book
Same words from a snake
She bought all his lies
Backspaced a mistake

 

People playing God
Heart stopped in a flash
Small one of no choice
Thrown out with the trash

 

Does anybody care?
Does anyone know?
A life in a womb
Made a final plateau

 

A world lost to flesh
Was stuck in a rut
Bought for a small price
Consumed by the smut

 

Regrets and the hurt
She would if she could
Be Mommy to him
Love all that she should

 

She found the good news
God came to forgive
She tells us her story
Her reason to live

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ApaqRasgirl commented on In a Flash

08-07-2010

wow, my friend, this one made me cry, I'm glad I never had to go through that, very heartfelt piece dear....I loved the rhythm and flow went very smooth.....thanks for the read. loves ya asha

SavVySam commented on In a Flash

08-02-2010

Maddi~Hope you don't mind if I say kudos and ME TOO! Brave offering on a timely and sensitive subject...powerful write!

Madelynn commented on In a Flash

07-14-2010

Tons of emotions going on here- for the reader. I won't voice my opinion on abortion (for/ or against) I will voice that I love all children, even the ones who arent born yet- and all mothers, both young and old, wheather they choose to deliver/ or not.. I won't judge. What I will judge is this poem- powerful, political, and religious topic you have chosen!- You have nailed each line with a perfection geared to provoke your reader into thought. Well written, and strong voice!-10, Maddi

Oblaidon

07/14/2010

Maddi, I guess you don't have to be for or against to know that some women may regret the decision they have made. Thanks for your comment. -Al

ccslim commented on In a Flash

06-10-2010

Really dig this through it's message and rhythm! Nice Touch Brother!

LeslieMay commented on In a Flash

06-09-2010

This is heartwrenching, but very powerful. All life deserves a chance....I became pregnant at 14. I was urged to get an abortion, but instead I chose adoption. Now I know he has a beautiful life, full of oppurtunity, that I was able to give him. You captured the emotion of your story perfectly.

Oblaidon

07/14/2010

May God bless you LeslieMay. Thank you for your comment. :)

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

Oblaidon’s Poems (26)

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What to be 2
Pressing On 8
Born to You and Me 9
Scorched 9
Daddy’s Girl 12
In a Flash 12
Skinny Dipping 20
lf 9
Woman to Man 21
Sign of the Cross 12
Love Embraced 21
Our Biggest Threat 14
In God I Trust 10
Driving Past Graves 17
When I was a Kid. 18
Pets by our Side 8
Rocky Shores 10
A minuscule bug 14
Heart of a Poet 29
My Armor is Faith 12
For Our Troops 8
Baby Has a Name. 17
My MI 3
My Love 8
The Grace of God 13
Rhyming Poems 20