In One Fell Swoop...


  • Mandi
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In One Fell Swoop...

A large oak tree silently stood

In our yard in the neighborhood

There, the hunter would hide during the day

Amongst the branches he would stay

When the sun dipped below edge of the earth

And the moon appeared with a smile of mirth
The very large bird took up his perch

Where from this position he could lurch
From side to side so he could  see

Far and wide, again he was free 

To spy upon our family's antics

To enjoy watching without panic
The children were still sleeping

At this time before dawn, so silence was keeping

It is my turn to watch the puppies this morn

And mother dog cuddles her first  born

As her four offspring bounced about

Then, just as the sun came out

The hunter, (an owl) did scoop,
Up one white pup, in one fell swoop...

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kdarcy commented on In One Fell Swoop...


Good job on the images. Nice story of the night finding the day, life can be hard that way. You managed to take the reader to the crashing end, never knowing it was coming. The title? not sure, maybe it does give too much away. Thanks for the invite, be well k

burnningman commented on In One Fell Swoop...


funny poem i like it seems just when we think all is ok booooom it hits us



do you think that the title gives too much away...? thank you for your comments

LadyLuck commented on In One Fell Swoop...


AAAWWWW!!! Nooo poor puppy!! I love the poem but-but-but- Its sooo sad!! Great write

HopeOhlarik commented on In One Fell Swoop...


OMG poor puppy *sadface* thats horrible. wonderful imagery though, great job mandi!

jj1562 commented on In One Fell Swoop...


simple but image provoking i liked it -- JJ1562

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